Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some individuals argue that in this digital time, cinema moreover theatres are no longer needed because human saw all the entertainment through online platform whereas other think its play crucial role in culturally as well as ecnomically. Both views have own marits but i completle agree with the first view because mobile phones help us to access any thing for free but economically tickets buying physically will support the nation.

one major reason is that tickets buying for new movies wil help the creaters as well as the econmically help own nation, This is because of exchange with money benificial for nation development. For instance, when last year a movie called Zero made ba pakistani film makers there tickets sold out in few hourse which helped makers as well the nation to after ownward the national stars want to work with the industries after few month the econmie or pakistan surge help both individuals and nation.

Another important point which i support digital age like using mobile phones have a finiancial benificial for peoples because in that way they are able to access any movie around the world with no cost for example, when i was 10 standerd i like to watch movies but i don't have money to buy tickets and gather around with my friends to watch so after thet i able to watch on my own cell phone with internet and watch movie like on netflix with free of cost .

In conclusion, both views have own positive and negative sides but i prefered digital age because of my cellphone with free of coast access any think, but theaters and cinemas are also played a crucial role in culturly as well as econmically.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You present a position in the introduction and conclusion, and you include relevant points about online access being cheaper and cinemas supporting filmmakers and the national economy. The examples about a Pakistani film and your own experience help make these ideas concrete. However, the discussion is uneven: the economic benefit of cinemas receives most of the development, while the cultural importance named in the prompt is not explained with a specific reason or example. Your position is also difficult to follow because you say you agree with the view that cinemas are no longer needed, but then argue that ticket sales benefit the country. Clarify whether you support online entertainment overall while recognising cinemas’ value, and develop both sides more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and phrases such as “For instance” and “In conclusion” help signal examples and closure. However, progression within paragraphs is often hard to follow. The first body paragraph moves from ticket sales to filmmakers, national development, stars and the economy without clearly connecting these points; the long sentence beginning “when last year a movie called Zero” is especially difficult to track. The second paragraph gives a personal example, but its link to the broader argument could be made more explicit. Use one main idea per paragraph, order supporting details clearly, and use pronouns and linking phrases with precise references rather than relying mainly on basic transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “digital age,” “entertainment,” “filmmakers,” “tickets” and “economically,” and you attempt to express ideas about access and national development. However, the range is limited and errors in spelling, word form and collocation are frequent enough to make parts of the message difficult to understand. Examples include “marits,” “creaters,” “econmically,” “free of coast” and “access any think.” Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “tickets buying” and “financial beneficial.” Build a more accurate set of expressions for comparing online viewing with cinema attendance, and check spelling and word forms carefully. More precise vocabulary would help you explain cultural and economic benefits clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a contrast introduced by “whereas” and explanations beginning “This is because.” However, control is limited: complex sentences often become incomplete or run together, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence boundaries can make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “other think its play crucial role” lacks accurate subject–verb forms, while the sentence beginning “when last year a movie called Zero” contains several clauses without clear grammatical links. The conclusion also shifts between past and present forms. Practise writing shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them using accurate subordinate clauses. Check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and that tense remains consistent.

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