Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Their is ongoing debate, some people says in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important but, on other hand some people says that cinemas and theatres are still important both economically and culturally.

On one hand people who said cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all entertainment online this reason is justify but in today era most of our people dont have enfough aproucuch to internet and the people who like to watch movies on big screen but they cannot afford it so, they prefer to go the cinemas and people and the most of the people want physical entertinament so they prefer the theatres. Ecnomicaly every year people spend more the 800 million dollars on cinemas and theatres, and this number is growing every year. This also give the lots of jobs and also cause the growth of food industry, and all this cause ecnonical growth.

On the other hand people who argue cinemas and theatres are still important both economically and culturall. But most of the people donot spend money on these because of all these are expensive than watching entertainment online, and you need a proper time and then travel to entertain your self so, most of the people prefer the online watching entertainment or giving the time to family.

Conclusion is the cinemas and theatres are still important both economically and culturally. Because their argue is more stronger then other. The ecnomicaly the theartres and cinemas industry is still growing rapidly every year.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You give a clear opinion in the conclusion that theatres and cinemas remain important, and you include relevant economic points, such as employment and growth in the food industry. However, the discussion of the two views is uneven: the first body paragraph mainly supports the continued importance of venues, while the opposing view is only briefly mentioned through cost, travel and time. Several claims, including the figure of “800 million dollars,” are not explained or supported, so the ideas remain limited. The response also contains 232 words, which is 18 words below the required minimum; 21 words copied from the task prompt were not counted. To develop the response, explain both sides more fully and add specific, relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two body paragraphs signalled by “On one hand” and “On the other hand,” and a conclusion. This helps the reader identify the broad direction of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is not always clear: the first body paragraph moves from internet access to screen size, physical entertainment, spending and employment without clearly linking each point. Connectors such as “so” and “and” are repeated, and the contrast between the two views is not consistently developed. The conclusion repeats the position and economic-growth claim rather than drawing the discussion together. Use clearer topic sentences and organise each paragraph around one main idea, supported in a logical sequence.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “digital age,” “economically,” “culturally,” “industry” and “economic growth,” which allows the main topic to be understood. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are repeated, particularly “people,” “important,” and “cinemas and theatres.” Frequent spelling errors—such as “enfough,” “entertinament,” “Ecnomicaly” and “theartres”—make the writing less clear and reduce the accuracy of the vocabulary. Some expressions are also unnatural, for example “physical entertainment” and “the people who like to watch movies on big screen.” Build a wider set of accurate collocations for discussing access, costs, audiences and cultural value, and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt some longer sentences and use basic contrast structures, including “On one hand” and “On the other hand.” However, the range of sentence forms is limited, and complex sentences are often difficult to follow because of errors in agreement, articles, verb forms and punctuation. For example, “some people says” should use a plural verb, while “this also give” needs agreement with its subject. The opening sentence is a run-on, and several clauses are joined with commas where full stops or clearer conjunctions are needed. These recurring errors sometimes make relationships between ideas unclear. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using controlled subordinate clauses and check subject–verb agreement.

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