Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Theatres and cinemas are an essential part of enjoyment. Group of friends enjoy in the theatres and cinemas by watching entaining things live. I strongly agree that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
To begin with, Numerous people argue that people can watch all the entertainment online this point is like that a person said i visit whole world, on mobile. People can't feel the real entertainment till they can't visit thee theatres and cinemas. From my perspective watching movies in theatre and cinema is real entertainment. In theatres there are live performances and it has a lot of enjoyment than watching on mobile phone or online. Iam a person from new generation and i still head to theatres to watch stage performances i go to watch the performance with group of friends and we enjoy alot there.
Moreover, everyone have their own view point regarding cinemas and theatres, numerous people don't like to go in theatres they believe that it is waste of money and time. Those people din't like entertainment things they always feel rude if we just talk these things in front of them. People went to cinemas with their families to watch the entertainment.Numerous people nowadays went to theatres instead of cinemas because people like live stage performances than watching digital. People prefer theatres to watch live movies and enjoy watching actor which are in front of them
In conclusion, i would like to say it is an essential for relaxing, entertaining and refreshment. I strongly agree that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
You state a clear opinion in the introduction and conclusion: you “strongly agree” that theatres and cinemas remain important. You also refer to the online-entertainment view and give personal examples of attending performances with friends. However, the discussion of both views is only minimal: the online view is mentioned but not explained, and the claim that theatres and cinemas matter economically is not supported. Several points, such as people who dislike theatres being “rude,” do not clearly develop the task. The response is also 6 words below the 250-word minimum; the 22 words copied from the prompt were not counted. To improve, explain each side with relevant reasons and examples, and develop your opinion beyond repeating it.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response has a recognisable introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “To begin with,” “Moreover” and “In conclusion” help show the intended structure. However, progression within the paragraphs is often unclear: the comparison with visiting the whole world on a mobile phone, comments about people feeling “rude,” and the shift from cinemas to live performances are not linked into a consistent line of reasoning. Some ideas are repeated, particularly the preference for live entertainment, while connections between sentences are sometimes abrupt. For stronger organisation, give each body paragraph one clear purpose—one for the online-view argument and one for the continuing cultural and economic value—and use references and transitions to show how each example supports that point.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
You use some task-related vocabulary, including “live performances,” “digital,” “culturally” and “economically,” so the topic is generally identifiable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, with frequent reliance on “numerous people,” “enjoyment” and “entertainment.” Several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, such as “enjoy in the theatres,” “entertaining things live,” “real entertainment” and “watch live movies.” Spelling and form errors, including “entaining,” “Iam” and “din't,” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise expressions and check spelling: for example, distinguish a live stage performance from a film shown in a cinema, and use natural combinations such as “attend a performance” or “provide a shared experience.”
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple sentences and longer structures, including “I strongly agree that…” and a sentence beginning “because,” and the main message is usually understandable. However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently in agreement, verb forms, articles and sentence construction. Examples include “Group of friends enjoy,” “everyone have,” “people went” where the present tense is intended, and “it is an essential.” Some sentences are difficult to follow because clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in “I visit whole world, on mobile.” Practise accurate present-tense forms, singular and plural agreement, and complete sentence boundaries. Building a few controlled complex sentences will help you express comparisons and reasons more clearly.
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