Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the modern world , the internet has changed the way people provide enjoy entertainment. Some people believe that theatres and cinema watch the online and the other thing. However, some people say that the cinema and theatre are not important. In my opinion, the digital age, theatre and cinema has very important in our daily life.

Firstly, one of the many reasons. that the cinema and the theatre. Such as, the cinema and theatre was important in our daily lives. the people has changed and lot of entertainment and fun and other thing. these people were on the online and watch the movies and clips and the mobile phone. They fun to the videos and the kind of the thing. And the individuals were on the cinema and the theatre, was fun and enjoy to the theatre watch on the mobile phone, while the cinema and theatre was essential for the life. Few peoples were interested on online and watch the movie and the lot of things, furthermore the theatre and cinema was important in our daily lives.

Secondly, there were many reasons have still important for the person. Such as, the cinema and theatre was vey important in the person of daily life. The cinema hall has very full crowd and that the friends will come and the enjoy for the hall. The screen was full and the crowd was noise in the hall and that the movie and fish were fully layers the crowd was fully noise in the hall. they can enjoy and entertainment in the hall.

In conclusion, some people say that the cinema and theatre are not important in our daily lives. In my opinion, the digital age, theatre and cinema has very important for both economically and culturally.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a clear preference in the introduction and conclusion: theatres and cinemas remain important. You also refer to online viewing and to the social experience of a crowded cinema, so the response touches on both sides of the question. However, the discussion is only minimal: the economic and cultural importance named in the prompt is not explained, and the view that online entertainment makes venues less important is not developed as a distinct argument. Several points repeat that cinemas are important without giving reasons or specific examples. To strengthen the response, explain each side separately—for example, the convenience and low cost of streaming, then employment, shared experiences, or the preservation of live performance—and support these points with relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “In conclusion” make the intended structure visible. However, ideas within the body paragraphs are not arranged coherently, and the links between sentences are often unclear. The first body paragraph moves repeatedly between online viewing and cinema without establishing a clear comparison; the second repeats the crowded-hall idea, including “the crowd was noise in the hall.” Some sentence fragments, such as “Firstly, one of the many reasons,” also interrupt the progression. Give each paragraph one clear main point, explain it in a logical sequence, and use linking words only where they accurately show the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, particularly the repeated use of “important,” “daily life,” “fun,” and “theatre and cinema.” This repetition limits your ability to express the economic, cultural and social arguments precisely. Some word combinations are difficult to understand, such as “the people has changed and lot of entertainment” and “the movie and fish were fully layers the crowd”; these choices strain the reader’s understanding. You do use relevant topic words such as “online,” “mobile phone,” “screen,” and “crowd,” which gives you a starting point. Build a wider set of accurate phrases for the task, and check that each word fits its context. For instance, describe a cinema as a “shared social experience” rather than repeating that it is important.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the overall position can be identified. However, grammatical control is inconsistent, and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. Examples include “theatre and cinema has very important,” where the subject–verb agreement and sentence structure are faulty, and “the people has changed,” which also has an agreement error. Articles and plurals are often missing or inaccurate, as in “the cinema and theatre was important” and “Few peoples.” Sentence boundaries and punctuation also need attention: “Firstly, one of the many reasons. that the cinema and the theatre” is not a complete, correctly punctuated sentence. Practise forming complete subject–verb sentences, checking agreement and articles, and separating ideas with accurate punctuation.

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