Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

It is often argued that some people has a view in which they debate about cinemas are not important as people can watch the movies and series on differnet apps with the subcription as well as free but on other side the view is for the point that it is cruical to have theatres for economically and culturally.

To begin with former view, Firstly, cinemas do not play a crucial role in people lives nowadays.Because many people have problem in which they can watch the movies and series at thier home in their confort zone for relaxtation and to get an entertainment. Secondly, it helps to reduce the income of transportation amd consumption of time which is suitable for people. For instance, in india 80% of population in nows generation do not go to theatres and cinemas for entertainment.

Futhermore shifting towards latter view, modern world in which cinemas and theatre plays an important role in both economically and culturally.As, the production member has to recover their income from which they produced and also get encouragement amd confidence for more production.Moreover,as culturally it helps for creating different morals in which people can get some knowledge about their daily life.Lastly, it helps children to watch things about their history and do hardwork for their own cast and religoins.

In conclusion,while both prospective have valid arguments,I firmly believe that importance of cinemas and theatres has their significant role is to go beneficial in address in the issue. This approach strike a balance between practically and long term impact.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address both sides of the discussion and state a preference for the continuing importance of cinemas and theatres. The first body paragraph gives relevant reasons for online viewing, including convenience at home and saving travel time, while the next mentions economic support for production and cultural learning. However, the position is not consistently clear: the conclusion says these venues have a “significant role” but does not clearly explain why your view outweighs the opposing one. Several points are also under-developed or unclear, such as the claim about “different morals” and children learning about their “cast and religoins.” The India statistic is presented without explanation or support. Develop each main reason with a clear explanation or a specific example, and make your opinion explicit throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “To begin with,” “Furthermore,” and “In conclusion.” However, progression within paragraphs is often mechanical, with repeated sequencing words (“Firstly,” “Secondly,” “Moreover,” “Lastly”) rather than clear links between claims and explanations. Some transitions are awkward or confusing, particularly “Futhermore shifting towards latter view,” and the conclusion’s “This approach” has no clear reference. The ideas would be easier to follow if each paragraph began with a focused topic sentence and then developed one or two connected points. Use linking phrases to show relationships, not simply to announce the next point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “economically,” “culturally,” “production,” and “encouragement,” and you distinguish between the “former” and “latter” views. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow. For example, “recover their income from which they produced” does not clearly express how cinemas support the film industry, and “go beneficial in address in the issue” is hard to interpret. Spelling errors such as “differnet,” “cruical,” and “religoins” are also noticeable. Aim for precise, natural phrases and check spelling; for instance, explain that ticket sales generate revenue for filmmakers rather than using an unclear phrase about recovering income.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use longer sentences and subordinate clauses, but the range is limited and complex constructions are often faulty. Errors occur frequently in agreement and sentence structure: “some people has a view” should use a plural verb, and “cinemas and theatre plays” has a subject–verb agreement problem. The opening sentence is difficult to follow because several ideas are joined without a clear grammatical structure. Punctuation and sentence boundaries also need attention, as in “nowadays.Because,” where the full stop creates an incomplete sentence. These errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Practise building clear simple sentences first, then add one controlled subordinate clause, checking agreement, articles, and punctuation.

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