Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Mostly people beleive that in the modren age, theaters and cinemas are no longer significant as people can watch all the acessories they want online but opponents says that theaters and cinemas are still efficent both financially and culturally. I beleive on first point because, I think people has not enough time to spent in cenimas. Nowadays, every singal person busy in their work and take all enterainment from socail apps.

In the modren age, people can't waste their money for these functions and can't waste time to go for watch and easily watch movies or dramas on their mobile phone. People easily watch anything on their mobile phone and can't need to buy any ticket or any effort. For intance, there are many apps like netflixe,prime video and tamasha app they provide us any movie after some days of realising. But in past new movies are only availabel in cenimas. Therefore, Its demonstrates that watch online best for saving money and time.

Other side, opponents say's that theaters and cinemas are very significant both economically and culturally but, I totally disagree with statment. Cinema not significant to pormote culture because there are lot of other thing for permoting any culture. When croued are togethere in any place the chance of robery and terrorism are on high value. Some years ago, there in my city there are very big robery during concert and died 4 people. So our life very significant so avoid these function.

To conclude, i beleive to watch some entertainment online its better choice for me.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear preference for online entertainment, and your points about saving time and money are relevant to the question. The examples of streaming apps and the past availability of new films in cinemas help explain this view. However, the task asks you to discuss both perspectives, and the opposing case is only briefly mentioned before you reject it. The economic importance of theatres and cinemas is not explained, while the cultural argument is dismissed without considering how shared performances or local productions can preserve culture. The robbery example shifts attention to public safety rather than showing why cinemas are culturally or economically unimportant. Develop both sides more evenly and support your opinion with reasons directly linked to the prompt.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

Your response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting online viewing, a paragraph addressing the opposing view, and a conclusion. Connectors such as “Therefore” and “To conclude” make some relationships clear. However, progression is uneven: the second body paragraph moves from culture to robbery and personal safety, which does not clearly advance the discussion of cinemas’ economic and cultural value. Several links are also mechanical or unclear, including “Other side” and “but, I totally disagree.” The conclusion repeats your preference but does not bring together the main reasons. Use clearer topic sentences, connect each example explicitly to its point, and make the transition between the two views more logical.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “significant,” “economically,” “culturally,” and “entertainment,” and readers can generally understand your main meaning. However, the range is limited and several words or phrases are inaccurate or repeatedly used. For example, “accessories” does not mean entertainment, “efficient” is not the right word for economic importance, and “functions” is an awkward choice for cinema visits. Spelling errors such as “modren,” “enterainment,” and “availabel” also make the writing less clear and reduce control. Build a more precise set of topic vocabulary and check spelling and collocations; this will help you express the contrast between online services and shared cultural venues more accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt to use both simple and longer sentences, including a reason clause in “because I think…” and a contrast introduced by “but.” However, complex structures are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make some sentences difficult to follow. Examples include “people has not enough time,” “opponents says,” and “people can’t need to buy,” where agreement or verb patterns are incorrect. Tense and sentence construction are also problematic in “Some years ago, there in my city there are…” and “So our life very significant.” Punctuation around conjunctions is inconsistent, as in “but, I totally disagree.” Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, complete sentence patterns, and controlled use of clauses before adding more complexity.

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