Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

In this technological era many individuals believe that dramas and movies are available on the devices at home so theatres and cinemas are no longer demanded as they used to. However, for others it is a vital source both traditionally and economically. Regardless of this, I stood by

If we talk about the culture, yes cinemas are crucial because it becomes a place of gathering for different people and they all feel a sense of belongingness and want to have a good time with others by enojying movies on big screen. Financially it could be a good aid for the country's gdp just like bollywood which competes not just in its native country, India, but globally as well.

Besides, nowdays people have barely time for any other activity and are deeply consumed by the daily life chores, so they prefer to opt for solutions which have made their lives easier and one of these is online streaming of shows on netflix, prime and other platforms beacuse it is more feasible to them than to go out just to watch a movie which they can do now in their comfortable bed.

Nevertheless, in this unpredictable fluctuating economy many citizens are struggling financially and are barely getting a good job which can help them provide finacial security, so now they prefer to save money for the necessaties such as electricity bills, utilities, travel expense etc and cannot afford luxury which is already available online.

Thus, in my opinion cinemas are not as important nowadays as it used to be because many individauals are preoccupied by their busy schedule and are also struggling financially, so they prefer to watch online then to pay for the cinema ticket.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response6.0
Coherence and Cohesion5.5
Lexical Resource6.0
Grammatical Range and Accuracy5.5
Overall6.0

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You discuss both perspectives: the cultural and economic value of cinemas, and the convenience and lower cost of online viewing. Your own view is also clear in the conclusion, where you argue that cinemas are less important today. The Bollywood example gives the economic point some support, while the discussion of household expenses explains why people may avoid cinema tickets. However, the opening ends with the incomplete phrase “Regardless of this, I stood by,” so your position is not established there. Some ideas also need fuller explanation: for example, explain more specifically how cinemas create cultural belonging, and develop the economic argument beyond one film industry example. This would make the response more fully developed across all parts of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with separate paragraphs for cultural and economic value, online convenience, financial pressures, and your conclusion. Linking expressions such as “Besides,” “Nevertheless,” and “Thus” help signal the direction of the argument. However, the opening paragraph is unfinished, and “Regardless of this” does not lead into a complete idea, disrupting the progression. The relationship between the two paragraphs about online viewing and financial hardship could also be made clearer, since both support the same side but are not explicitly connected. Some transitions feel mechanical, and the conclusion largely repeats earlier points. Use a complete introduction that previews both views and your position, then connect each paragraph’s main idea more explicitly.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of topic vocabulary, including “sense of belonging,” “online streaming,” “financial security,” and “utilities.” These expressions help communicate cultural, technological, and economic points. There are also attempts at more formal wording, such as “preoccupied” and “fluctuating economy,” although some combinations are unnatural or imprecise: “no longer demanded” would be better expressed as “no longer in demand,” and “a good aid for the country’s GDP” is not a natural collocation. Spelling errors such as “enojying,” “nowdays,” “beacuse,” and “necessaties” also reduce accuracy. Aim for precise, natural collocations and proofread spelling; this will make your vocabulary more controlled without requiring unnecessarily complex words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentences, including clauses beginning with “because,” “which,” and “so,” and most of your meaning remains clear. Some grammatical errors occur, however. The opening contains the incomplete construction “Regardless of this, I stood by,” and “it becomes a place” shifts awkwardly from the plural subject “cinemas.” In the conclusion, “cinemas are not as important nowadays as it used to be” has a subject–pronoun agreement problem; use “they used to be.” There are also issues with articles and sentence construction, as in “barely time” and the long sentence beginning “Nevertheless, in this unpredictable fluctuating economy.” Check agreement and sentence boundaries, and ensure each introductory phrase leads to a complete clause.

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