Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.5)
In the contemporary world, people argue that the theatres and cinemas are irrelevant in this modern day and age where everything is available on our fingertips. While others say that its more cultural and monetary benefits of theatres and cinemas. In these essay we have discussed both point of view as well as my opinion. As i lean more towards conserving our cultural theatres and cinemas.
Firstly, people who think its no longer important to have cinemas and theatres, as it is easily available on your phones or laptops. Further, it shows there is no need for wasting so much space, energy and limited resources on cinemas or theatres as people can easily have access to streaming platforms such as netlfix or amazon prime, where they can binge watch whole series or a movie while in comfort of their homes without leaving the house.
Secondly, few argue that its crucial to preserve our heritage in these artforms which are being performed in theatres and shows which are available in cinemas sharing some time with your loved ones to enjoy the moments and relive these stories which are being showcased in front of them. Involving people from different parts of the society and culture, bringing them together to see dramas and operas. live emotions such as anger, comedy and thriller.
In my opinion, theatres has been part of our culture since ages people used to carve drawings on stones to potray their story, which eventually lead as to create theatres and cinemas. They not only help to create revenue also builds fanbase which are dedicated to see more of these genre. It has been shifted towards digital platforms, but i can never eliminate the core of these artform.
In conclusion, cinema and theatre are integral part of our economy as well as our culture to showcase them to the world.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
The essay addresses both viewpoints and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. While you mention streaming platforms and the cultural value of live performances, the arguments lack depth and specific examples. For instance, the discussion on economic benefits is mentioned in the prompt but remains largely undeveloped in your body paragraphs. To reach a higher band, ensure that each point is supported with more detailed reasoning or concrete examples. The introduction is also slightly repetitive, and the conclusion is quite brief, failing to fully summarise the main points discussed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your argument. However, the use of cohesive devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'In these essay we have discussed' and 'Further, it shows there is no need'. Some transitions between sentences feel abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear. While the overall progression is logical, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects back to the main prompt.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey your meaning, including terms like 'contemporary', 'irrelevant', 'heritage', and 'integral'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'available on our fingertips' (should be 'at our fingertips') and 'potray their story' (spelling error). Additionally, some expressions are repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'theatres and cinemas'. To improve, try to use more precise collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a more sophisticated control of language.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally hinder the flow, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('theatres has been part', 'theatres and cinemas are irrelevant... while others say that its more cultural'), and punctuation errors. The use of articles is also inconsistent. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on proofreading for basic errors like verb tense consistency and singular/plural agreement to improve your accuracy.
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