Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-07-31
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
in this contemporary era, Everyone depend on internet few individual consider that people should go to theatres and cineplex for entertainment whereas, another believe that they should stay at their home and get entertain with useing online video . I will elaborate my both views in upcoming paragraph.
In the first hand, people want to go outside for entertainment . it is good idea for country geed wealth. For example ,when people would go cinemas for movies they will buy ticket and cinemas owners will pay taxes and who people will work there as cineplex need like cleaners and security guards they will reduce unemployment . In result , cinema owners and other worker will pay taxes it will be good for country development in economy groth.
in the other hand , people believe that stay home and entertainment online will best . it is a good way of time saving .For intence , individual will go out side they will use own vehicle , firstly they will get patrol in their vehicle then create a lot of pollution and result , some people who have not enough time of their work they cannot manage they will sick in few days.
In my opinion , Technology upgrade everyday human should ne move with modren era . it is depend on human work schedule and thair monthly budget . people should stay at home because nowdays everything ableble at home they should be do experience in new way for entertainment online they will already paid they will pay taxes online watching videos and movie etc
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding economic benefits and environmental impact are somewhat superficial and lack depth. For instance, the explanation of how cinema attendance reduces unemployment is quite simplistic. The conclusion is also somewhat confusing, as it attempts to support the online entertainment view but does so with unclear reasoning regarding taxes and availability. To improve, you should aim to provide more specific, well-reasoned examples and ensure your personal opinion is clearly articulated and logically supported throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In the first hand' and 'in the other hand' are non-standard and distract from the flow. Additionally, the transition between sentences is sometimes abrupt, and the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the final paragraph where the connection between 'technology upgrade' and the conclusion is weak. To achieve a higher score, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and phrases more naturally to connect your ideas and improve the overall logical progression of your arguments.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'get entertain', 'geed wealth', 'get patrol', and 'everything ableble'. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. While you attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'contemporary era' and 'economic growth', the overall range is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To improve, focus on learning common collocations and ensuring that you use words in their correct grammatical form. Expanding your vocabulary through reading academic texts will also help you use more sophisticated language appropriately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('Everyone depend'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which makes the text difficult to read. There is a limited range of complex structures, and the attempts at using them are often faulty, leading to confusion. For example, the sentence 'In result, cinema owners and other worker will pay taxes it will be good for country development in economy groth' lacks proper punctuation and grammatical connection. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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