Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Rapid urbanization or increases in the population of world they change many thigs in the society. Because many modern technologies occur in the environment like different devices links with internet.
The view of some people says that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all entertainment they want online. i partially agree about this statement because everything have their own unique quality in every era. So, the theatres and cinemas also have same importance as as before arriving the internet facility. These things also depend upon the age of peoples because older peoples much like the drams and films in the theatres.
on the other hand, young generation also like to view new films which are not uploaded on internet. Because some films are bans uploading on internet from production house. So, these films first sell to cinemas house to gain revenue. Some peoples like old and young also have not free time to go cinemas for watching films so they use mobile phone and other devices links with internet to watching movies.
i have a example regarding this essay in developed country like Japan
have every kind of facility regarding the internet but the peoples of Japan are very friendly, so they go to cinemas at the weekend because love to watch movies with children's. And enjoy the movements of life so in every era and cinemas have economically and culturally importance because huge amount gain from their tickets .and every thig is good if the use is good
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding why cinemas remain important (economic and cultural) are mentioned but not fully explored or supported with depth. The example of Japan is relevant but lacks sufficient detail to strengthen the argument effectively. The essay tends to over-generalize, and the position is somewhat vague. To improve, you should expand on your points with more specific reasoning and ensure that your personal opinion is clearly articulated and consistently supported throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. While there are attempts to use cohesive devices like 'on the other hand' and 'because', the transitions between sentences are frequently abrupt. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'And enjoy the movements of life so in every era and cinemas have economically and culturally importance'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by these structural issues, making the reader work harder to follow your argument. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring clear topic sentences would significantly enhance the coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of awkward word choices and non-standard collocations, such as 'many thigs', 'drams', and 'bans uploading'. Some phrases are used incorrectly, such as 'enjoy the movements of life' and 'huge amount gain from their tickets'. While the meaning is generally understandable, the lack of precision and the frequent errors in word choice prevent the essay from reaching a higher band. You should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to express your ideas more naturally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay relies heavily on simple sentence structures, and there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('everything have', 'peoples much like'), incorrect article usage, and missing prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and misused commas. While the errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to cause difficulty for the reader. To improve, you should practice constructing more complex sentences and pay closer attention to basic grammatical rules like pluralization and verb tense consistency.
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