Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Many people belive that in the digitalization people are no longer prefer to go outside and watch entertainments on theatres and cinemas. Other believe that theatres and cinemas play an important roll for both economically and culturally. Although, wide spread of technology become cheaper and convinent for people. I believe that people feel emotionally connected more when they are watching movies in theater and cinemas.
On the one hand, at present time, technology play an essential roll in each and every aspect.Consequently it become more cheaper and easy to access in the world so that people can entertain themselves, However, people watch world wide movies and acts all over the globe. For instance, Netflix and Amazon Prime these are major part of today's entertainment industries, as a result people start purchasing there membership with few dollars, owing to the original movie sequences are deducted from this platform and people does not conclude the stories.
On the other hand, individuals still prefer to go outside in the theaters and cinema halls for their experince, because many people believe that they can connect with the story and pattern of the acts in theater very well as compare to digital platform. Therefore, the excitment of the first day first show are still in the people believes that as on the webside they relises later in few the months, also it plays a significant roll for the economically gives more profit. For example, In the recent BBC research individuals spend time with their family and friends while watching movies in cinemas and theaters.
In conclusion, people argues that in the digital era individuals no longer prefer to go to the cinemas and theaters other believe that and at present both plays an essencial roll for the economically and culturally. However, technology is become cheaper and easy to excess. I strongly believe that people wanted to connect more when they watch movies in cinemas and theaters.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the argument regarding the economic importance of cinemas is mentioned but lacks specific detail or clear explanation. The points made about Netflix and Amazon Prime are relevant, but the explanation of why these platforms might be considered inferior to the cinema experience is slightly underdeveloped. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your examples with more depth and ensure that your reasoning is fully articulated rather than just stated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand', 'On the other hand', and 'In conclusion' to signal shifts in the argument. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as the use of 'Although' at the start of a sentence in the introduction, which is a fragment. Additionally, the flow between sentences is occasionally hindered by awkward phrasing, making the progression of ideas feel a bit disjointed in places.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but there are frequent errors in word choice and collocation that occasionally impede clarity. For example, you use 'digitalization' when you mean 'the digital age', and 'roll' instead of 'role'. Phrases like 'original movie sequences are deducted' are unclear and do not convey the intended meaning. You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the lack of precision in word choice prevents a higher score. Focusing on learning common collocations and checking word forms will significantly improve your lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('people does not conclude', 'technology play'), incorrect verb forms ('technology is become'), and punctuation errors. These errors are noticeable and sometimes make the reader work harder to understand your point. While you attempt complex sentences, they are often faulty. To improve, you should focus on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement, before attempting more complex structures.
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