Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
nowadays , it has become a significant issue about entertainment . some individuals argue that in the technology era, theater and cinemas are no longer essential as citizens can watch all the entertainment they want on the internet .whereas, others consider that theater and cinemas are still crucial both economical and cultural . i believe that people prefer to watch online entertainment because that saves time as well as few charges on the one hand, a major reason is why is theater and cinemas are still essential is because for
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response is significantly under the required word count of 250 words, reaching only 90 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. The essay fails to develop the arguments, leaving the discussion of both views incomplete and the personal opinion unsupported. The text stops abruptly mid-sentence, which prevents the development of a coherent argument or a clear conclusion. To improve, you must ensure you write at least 250 words and provide fully developed paragraphs for each viewpoint, followed by a clear, supported conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay lacks a clear structure due to its unfinished nature. While there is a basic attempt to introduce the topic and use transition signals like 'on the one hand', the lack of completion makes it impossible to assess paragraphing or the logical progression of ideas. The text is too fragmented to demonstrate effective use of cohesive devices or paragraph management. To improve, focus on planning your essay into four distinct paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs for the opposing views, and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. Phrases like 'significant issue' and 'technology era' are used, but the range is very limited. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'economical and cultural' (which should be 'economically and culturally' to match the adverbial usage). The vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. You should aim to use a wider range of topic-specific vocabulary related to media, economics, and social trends to demonstrate a higher level of lexical control.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains several grammatical errors, such as 'a major reason is why is theater and cinemas are still essential is because for', which is syntactically incoherent. There are also issues with punctuation, capitalization (e.g., 'i' instead of 'I'), and sentence structure. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple or poorly constructed complex sentences. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree and that your sentences are complete and grammatically sound.
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