Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-05
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
I believe the online entertainment is becoming increasingly popular, butt theatre and cinema are still important both economically and culturally. Later on we discuss both the views in detail.
Firstly People can watch all the entertainment they want online because there are different online platform available to public for online entertainment like Netflix, You tube, Online Streaming, etc. Therefor there is no need of theatre and cinemas. Furthermore there is another reasons to watch entertainment online like watch at home, no travel, privacy, etc. Nowadays traffic is very big problems for all of us in large cities. That's why in entertainment areas their are huge amount of public rush this is the another benefit to watch online entertainment. People can also entertain with family in online entertainment.
On the other hand others people argue that theaters and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. There are many people that do jobs in theatre and cinema so this are totally depend upon theatre and cinema. Furthermore theatre and cinema give another vibes to public some people like to watch entertainment on cinemas and theatre because they are like outing, entertainment, travelling, etc. Many young people like to watch movie in theatre and cinema in the group. so theatre is also important economically and culturally.
In conclusion, most people can watch all the entertainment they want online butt there is importance of cinema and theatres both economically and culturally. My opinion is Both have different enjoyment and entertainment but both have importance.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding the economic and cultural importance of cinemas are somewhat superficial, relying on repetitive phrasing like 'economically and culturally' without providing specific examples or deeper analysis. The position is clear, but the supporting points lack the depth required for a higher band score. To improve, you should expand on your points with specific examples, such as the social experience of a film festival or the impact of cinema closures on local businesses.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'Therefor' (spelled incorrectly) and 'Furthermore' are used, but the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. Additionally, the referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'this are totally depend upon', where the subject reference is vague. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring clear logical progression between sentences would significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate to convey the basic message but is quite repetitive and lacks precision. You frequently use simple terms like 'entertainment', 'important', and 'watch'. There are also errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'public rush' instead of 'crowds' or 'high footfall', and 'entertain with family' instead of 'enjoy entertainment with family'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including less common lexical items and more precise collocations related to the topic of media and economics.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('this are totally depend'), article usage ('the another benefit'), and spelling errors ('butt' instead of 'but', 'Therefor' instead of 'Therefore'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for subject-verb agreement and basic sentence construction will help improve your score.
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