Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-07
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Every one has thier own thinking in this modern era theatres and cinemas are important but this this also true people can watch all the entertainment they want online.but every new movie related in firstly in theaters and cinemas later organizers upload on online websites with the help of theatres and cinemas movies geting income and being famous.
On the other hand people thinks that theatres and cinemas are still important which is also write opinion.
Many movies release only in cinema and theatres that movies never upload on online websites and not on also tv.
I believe that theatres is very important in this frustrated era people can go watch movie in cinema feel fresh and spend time with their friends and families which is too good for us I'm also go on and off watch movie and take my mind relax.
In the theater some people never gone due to expensive tickets but I think many small cities their are many cinema who provide cheap price ticket I think very people should go In once a life. a big sreen, comfortable seats,good sound quality,and clear image in cinemas there are very nice and comfortable environment.
Once I remember I was only 10 years old that was my first time in cinema with my parents we watch movie and in the interval their is aa couple how seat beside by me and aa boy proposed to girl in movie interval and theatres mangement can also help him to made their day memorable on theaters screen they put that couple cute photographs and older memories. And that girl was so impressed and say yes to him .that I know theatres and cinemas mangement can do this for every body how request them to do .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited. The arguments regarding economic and cultural importance are somewhat superficial and rely heavily on personal anecdotes rather than broader analysis. The structure is disjointed, and the explanation of why cinemas remain relevant is repetitive. To improve, you should focus on expanding your points with more sophisticated reasoning—for example, discussing the social experience of cinema or the economic impact on the film industry—rather than relying on personal stories.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear logical progression. Paragraphing is inconsistent, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or missing. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices, they are frequently used incorrectly or in a way that makes the text difficult to follow. For instance, the shift from the general argument to the personal anecdote about the cinema proposal is jarring and lacks a clear link to the main topic. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in contrast') and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, often relying on simple phrasing like 'very important' or 'good'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'movie related in firstly' and 'geting income'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas with precision. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more academic collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition. Expanding your range to include topic-specific vocabulary related to the film industry or digital media would also be beneficial.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, including run-on sentences and fragments. Punctuation is often misused, particularly with commas and capitalization. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent (e.g., 'people thinks', 'theatres is'), and there are frequent spelling errors (e.g., 'thier', 'sreen', 'mangement'). The range of grammatical structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of complex sentences with appropriate subordinating conjunctions.
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