Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Now a days many people say that digital age, Theatres and cinemas are very significant as individuals can see all the entertainments they watch on mobile phones and other device. Some argue that theatres and cinemas are still crucial both economically and culturally. We discuss both view and give my own perspective. On the one hand, Theatres and cinemas are significant in our life they enhance our knowledge and make feel happy however, change mind this is helpful for society. For instance, Pupils using internet in our daily life and watching videos, dramas pr comedy show. therefore watching news and podcast and if they want to listen any thing then watched and if they learn they also watch and learned. In addition they easily watch in mobile, laptops and other resources. On the other hand, Theatres and cimemas is also very benefical our society. They change our mind and make feel very happy. Moreover most of people very busy in their life so in weekend they go with friends and family and going cinemas to watching different movies, To cite an example, if individuals go theatres and cinemas they enjoy and share their opinion and knowledge in society and this is good for all. Although, in my perspective both are beneficial but if people is going some days in a month or week this is useful and feel happy.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, which significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, the points are underdeveloped and lack sufficient depth. For instance, the discussion on the economic and cultural importance of cinemas is repetitive and lacks specific, concrete examples. The arguments are presented in a very simplistic manner, and the conclusion is brief and lacks a clear summary of the main points. To improve, you must expand on your ideas with more detailed explanations and relevant examples to ensure the response is fully developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and a lack of clear transitions between ideas. While some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'In addition' are used, they are sometimes applied mechanically or incorrectly. The referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult to follow the progression of the argument. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively separate the distinct points of the discussion. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Words like 'significant', 'important', 'happy', and 'watch' are used frequently, which restricts the range of expression. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'make feel happy' instead of 'make us feel happy' or 'change mind' instead of 'provide a change of pace'. The essay lacks the range of less common lexical items required for higher bands. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and academic collocations related to the topic of entertainment and technology.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'Theatres and cimemas is also very benefical'), missing articles, and incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'if they learn they also watch and learned'). The sentence structures are predominantly simple, with few successful attempts at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and verb tenses.
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