Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

IN THIS TECHNOLOGICAL ERA , SOME INDIVIDUALS THINKS THAT MOVIE THEATRES AND CINEMA HALLS HAVE NO LONGER NEED BECAUSE IF PEOPLE WANT TO WATCH THEY CAN DO IT ONLINE. WHILE, SOME OF IT BELIEVES THAT IT GIVES MEJOUR CONTRIBUTION IN ECONOMIC AND CULTURAL GROWTH. IN CINEMAS PEOPLE GET EXTRA ORDINARY EXPERIENCE CAME UP WITH VISUALS AND SOUND AND IN THIS ESSAY ALSO EXPLAIN BOTH THE VIEW POINT AND ALSO MY GIVEN PERSONAL POINT OF VIEW IN FOLLOWING PARAGRAPHS.

TO COMMENCE WITH, ALL THE PERSONS CAN FIND OUT ALL THE ENTERTAINMENT THING TO WATCH SUCH AS MOVIES AND SERIES ON ONLINE PLATFORMS SO THEY NO ANY NEED TO LEAVES THEIR HOMES FOR FIND ANY ENJOYABLE THINGS . FOR INSTANCE, ONLINE WEBSITE LIKE NETFLIX AND JIOHOTSTAR WHERE PEOPLE CAN WATCH TRENDING AND LATEST FILMS ALSO INDIVIDUALS CAN CHOOSE ACCORDING TO THEIR INTEREST. FURTHERMORE, IN SAME AMOUNT OF MOVIE TICKET SUBSCRIBER CAN WATCH LOT OF THING FOR THE PARTICULAR THINGS.

ON THE OTHER HAND, MOVIE THEATRES AND CINEMAS HALL ARE LARGELY CONTRIBUTES IN COUNTRIES GDP AND ECONOMY BECAUSE WHEN EVERY MOVIES WHERE RELIES IN TOCIS THEY SHOULD HAVE TO BUY RIGHTS FOR CASTING THERE AND AFTER SELLING ALL THE TICKETS THEY NEED TO PAY TAX ON THIS. IN ADDITION TO FOR MANAGING ALL THE THING THERE HAVE TO REQUIRES EMPLOYEES AND SO LOCAL PEOPLE CAN GET EMPLOYMENT.

IN CONCLUSION, PEOPLE CAN WHATEVER THEY WANT TO WATCH FOR ENTERTAINMENT ON ONLINE PLATFORMS BUT ACCORDING TO ME THEATERS ARE MORE BENEFICIAL FOR GET VISUAL AND SOUND EXPERIENCE IT ALSO CONTIBUTES IN ECONOMY.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention economic and cultural growth, the explanation is somewhat superficial and lacks specific, well-developed examples. The argument regarding online platforms is clearer, but the overall depth of analysis is restricted by the brevity of the paragraphs. To improve, ensure that each point is supported by a more detailed explanation or a concrete example to fully satisfy the 'well-developed' requirement of higher band descriptors.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. For example, 'TO COMMENCE WITH' is used in a way that feels forced, and the transition 'IN ADDITION TO FOR MANAGING' is grammatically awkward. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as 'SOME OF IT BELIEVES', where the pronoun 'it' does not clearly refer back to a noun. Improving the variety and accuracy of linking words and ensuring clear logical progression between sentences would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary range is limited and often repetitive. There are several instances of word-choice errors and non-standard collocations, such as 'MEJOUR CONTRIBUTION' (major), 'ENTERTAINMENT THING', and 'RELIES IN TOCIS' (likely meaning 'released in theatres'). These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding. To reach a higher band, you should focus on using more precise vocabulary related to the topic—such as 'digital streaming services', 'cinematic experience', or 'economic impact'—and ensure that you are using words in their correct grammatical form.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your message. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'SOME INDIVIDUALS THINKS', 'CINEMAS HALL ARE LARGELY CONTRIBUTES') and sentence structure (e.g., 'SO THEY NO ANY NEED TO LEAVES'). The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences with some errors in complex constructions. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles and prepositions. Proofreading for these fundamental errors will help ensure your ideas are communicated more effectively.

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