Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

A significant number of people believe that the cinemas and theatres are no longer great sources of entertainment as they have access to a large number of online streaming platforms to entertain themselves. In contrast, others believe that they promote our culture and contribute to the economy.

Those who support the first view believe that the digital media platforms make the entertainment Cheap, flexible and more entertaining. Therefore public do not need to pay a large amount of money or fixed schedule for enjoyment. In Addition individuals have cheap subscriptions of digital media, which allow them to watch and enjoy along family with dramas, movies and series that take months to release in the cinemas. For example, Netlfix is a digital platform which has largest audience, because it entertain the people with the latest movies, dramas and whatever they tend to watch in cheap along a feature of sharing it with numerous individuals with single subscription.

On the other hand those who support the second view believe that cinemas and theatres play a vital role in the development of economy and culture. This is because a large number of people earn their living from them and create a number of jobs for individuals, which directly contribute to economy growth as well as they provide the opportunity to promote our traditions, lifestyle and encourage people to adopt their culture by performing physically in front of audience. For instance, Government of pakistan conduct Cultural festivals and seminars in cinemas and theatres to promote culture and install multiple stalls of foods for selling. As a result, people got a chance to learn more about their traditions and taste different foods.

Having considered both views I am convinced that digital media engaged us more in entertainment Instead of theatres and cinemas. This is because people do not have to much time to physically attend some entertainment programs, while they have online a large number of entertaining platforms in a relatively cheap price with a wide range of programs.

In conclusion, both views raise valid points, however I believe that we should adopt digital media for entertainment because it offers flexibility of time and place as well as access to several entertaining shows without any restrictions.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response addresses all parts of the prompt, discussing both views and providing a clear personal opinion. The ideas are relevant and generally well-supported. However, the development of the second view could be more nuanced; for instance, the link between cinemas and economic growth is mentioned but could be expanded with more specific global examples rather than just local ones. The position is consistent throughout the essay, and the conclusion effectively summarizes the main argument. To reach a higher band, ensure that the supporting arguments are fully explored with more depth and analytical detail.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different viewpoints. Cohesive devices such as 'In contrast', 'On the other hand', and 'As a result' are used to guide the reader. However, some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and there are minor issues with referencing and flow, such as the phrase 'along family with dramas' which is awkward and disrupts the cohesion of the sentence. Improving the variety and naturalness of linking words would enhance the overall flow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to express ideas clearly. There is an attempt to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'digital media platforms', 'subscriptions', and 'cultural festivals'. However, there are instances of imprecise word choice and collocation errors, such as 'entertain the people with the latest movies... in cheap' and 'engaged us more in entertainment'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the range of vocabulary is somewhat limited. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise collocations and avoiding informal or grammatically incorrect phrasing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the cinemas', 'the economy'), subject-verb agreement ('Netlfix... entertain the people'), and preposition usage. Punctuation is generally functional, but there are some awkward sentence constructions that impede the natural flow of the text. The student demonstrates an ability to construct complex sentences, but the accuracy of these structures needs improvement to avoid distracting the reader. Focusing on basic grammatical accuracy and proofreading for article usage would be beneficial.

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