Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-10
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people say that in a digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer crucial as folks can watch all the entertainment they want online. Other argue that theater and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. In my point of view it is quite useful to have cinemas and theaters. Moreover the main reason to reduce the screen time. Daily usage of phones and laptops can effect our eye sigh. Further more it would destroy our brain. For example if people are watching the dramas or films on screen Their eyes would be affected. Although it is the waste of time . No doubt they would enjoy it but it has negative impacts on their health. Consequently the other reason is it is waste of money. Any how they are using their phones or laptops they would definatly charged or pay the bills. If they would go cinema for films or what ever they want to watch. They would buy the ticket for once. will save their money. On the other side of the mirror the people who think that it is benefical for economy as well as for culture so it is not bad thought. They are true, For intense if e have cinemas or theaters then foreign people will come in our country for enjoyment . It would climb our economy. Most important thing is it will represent our culture that what kind of king or emperors we have in past. In nut shall it is important to have cinemas or theaters in our country.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both views and provides a personal opinion, meeting the basic requirements of the prompt. However, the development of ideas is limited and often superficial. For instance, the argument regarding 'eye sight' and 'brain' damage is not well-supported or relevant to the economic/cultural importance of cinemas. The economic argument is mentioned but lacks depth, and the cultural argument is vague. The position is clear, but the supporting points are underdeveloped, which prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. To improve, you should focus on providing more logical, well-reasoned arguments that directly address the prompt's core themes of economic and cultural significance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a clear structure, with ideas presented in a single, dense paragraph rather than distinct sections for each viewpoint. While there are some attempts at cohesive devices like 'Moreover', 'Consequently', and 'In nut shall' (in a nutshell), they are often used incorrectly or mechanically. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the logic. The lack of proper paragraphing significantly hinders the flow of the argument. To improve, you must organize your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, two body paragraphs (one for each view), and a conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, often relying on informal phrasing like 'folks' and 'what ever'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'climb our economy' instead of 'boost our economy' and 'eye sigh' instead of 'eyesight'. The range of vocabulary is limited, and the student struggles to express complex ideas with precision. While the meaning is generally conveyed, the lack of variety and frequent errors in collocation and spelling restrict the score. Expanding your vocabulary to include more academic and topic-specific terms would greatly enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('Other argue', 'They would definatly charged'), sentence fragments, and incorrect punctuation. The range of structures is limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with some attempts at complex structures that are often faulty (e.g., 'If they would go cinema... They would buy the ticket'). The frequent errors in basic grammar, such as missing articles and incorrect verb tenses, indicate a need for a stronger grasp of fundamental English grammar rules to improve clarity and accuracy.
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