Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
NOWDAYS MANY PEOPLE SOWS THE MOVIES,SHOWS ON THE ONLINE PLATFORM SUCH AS NETFLIX,AMAZONE PRIME APPLE TV. ALSO WATCH ON UNOFFICIALLY PLATFORM SUCH AS NETMIRROR,HD HUB4U,ETC. THEY HAVE STILL IMPORTANT OF THE THEATERS AND CINEMAS IN CURRENT DAS. IN MY OPINION ONLINE ENTERTAINMENT IS VERY CONVIENIENT, CINEMAS AND THEATERS ARE STILL IMPORTANT.
ON THE ON HAND, ONLINE ENTERTAINMENT HAS MANY ADVANTAGES. PEPOLE CAN WATCH MOVIES OR SHOWS ANY TIME AT HOME. NOWDAYS PLATFORM GIVE THE LARGE NUMBER OF TV PROGRAMME AND SHOWS ALSO MOVIES ARE EAISLY AVAILABLE ON THE WEBSITE OR APPS. THEY ARE MORE CONVIENIENT FOR THIS PEOPLE LIVES FAR FROM THE THEATERS AND CINEMAS.POOR PEOPLE CAN NOT AFFOERD THE WATCH MOVIES ON CINEMAS SO THEY PREFER THE WATCH MOVIES BY THROUGH THA ONLINE PLATFORM. ALSO ONLINE PLATFORM ARE FREE OR EASY TO ACCECE ANY WERE AND ANY MOBILE SO THEY ARE MORE USEFULL.
ON THE OTHER HAND, ONLINE RESOURCES CAN NOT REPLACE THE THEATERS AND CINEMAS.THEATER AND CINEMAS CAN GIVE LIVE EXPERINCE OF WATCH THE MOVIES. BY THROUGH THE THEATERS AND CINEMAS WE CAN ENJOY THE TIME WITH FAMILY AND FRIENDS. ALSO CINEMAS AND THEATERS GIVE THE GOOD EXPERIENCE OF WATCH MOVIES WITH FRIENDS.
FURTHERMORE, THEATERS AND CINEMAS ARE STILL IMPORTANT FOR THE ECONOMICALLY AND CULKTURALLY. THEY PROVIDE JOBS FOR ACTORS,DIRETORS,TECHNICIANS,CLEANERS, AND OTHER WORKERS. THEY ALSO SUPPORT THE RESTAURANTS,SHOPS AND OTHER SMALL BUSINESSES NEARBY. IN ADDITION THEATERS AND CINEMAS HELP TO PRESEVE THE LOCAL CULTURE BY PRESENTING TRADITIONAL PLAYS, MUSIC AND PERFORMANCES.
IN CONCLUSION, ONLOINE ENTERTAINMENT IS MORE CONVIENENT, AFFORDABLE, AND EASY TO ACCESS BUT THE THE THEATERS AND CINEMAS ARE NOT CONVIENENT NOW DAYS.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the economic and cultural importance of cinemas is mentioned, but the points are listed rather than fully explored or supported with specific examples. The conclusion is also slightly contradictory, as it states that cinemas are 'not convenient' despite the previous paragraphs arguing for their continued importance. To improve, you should aim to expand on your points with more detailed explanations or real-world examples to provide a more comprehensive discussion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive, such as the frequent use of 'also' and 'on the other hand'. Some transitions are awkward, such as 'by through the theaters', which hinders the flow of ideas. Additionally, the referencing is sometimes unclear, and the progression of ideas within paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that sentences connect logically will help elevate your score in this criterion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There are several spelling errors (e.g., 'NOWDAYS', 'AMAZONE', 'EAISLY', 'ACCECE', 'CULKTURALLY') and some awkward word choices, such as 'unofficially platform' instead of 'unofficial platforms'. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on basic terms like 'good experience' or 'important'. To improve, focus on learning more precise collocations and academic vocabulary, and ensure you proofread your work to correct basic spelling mistakes that distract the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include incorrect article usage ('the theaters'), subject-verb agreement ('many people sows'), and awkward phrasing ('by through the theaters'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence structure and basic grammatical rules will be essential for improvement.
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