Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

theaters and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally and also some people say that in the digital age are no longer important

I agree with the statement of theatres and cinemas are still important to hang out with their family and with close friends watch movies spend lot of time do funny activities and watch movie in a cinematic way and enjoy the big screen while watching it bit it little bit expenses for ticket and some for food and drinks

on the other hand some people are enjoy the same movie on the digital way a lone and without any amount expenses for ticket and expensive food they only get subscription it valuable for a monthly they can watch all the entertainment hey want online but it is not feel like cinematic it is as the same see the to their phone it not a special feel on the phone they cant enjoy the moments with their family or friends

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 163 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While you attempt to address both sides of the argument and state an opinion, the discussion is superficial and lacks the necessary depth or supporting examples required for an academic essay. The ideas are repetitive and lack the expansion needed to fully explore the economic and cultural importance mentioned in the prompt. To improve, you must develop each paragraph with specific, well-supported arguments and ensure the essay meets the length requirement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks a clear structure. There is no introduction or conclusion, and the response is presented as a single, poorly organized block of text. The use of cohesive devices is very limited, making the progression of ideas difficult to follow. For example, the transition 'on the other hand' is used, but the overall flow is disjointed. To achieve a higher score, you need to organize your writing into clear paragraphs with a logical introduction, body paragraphs that focus on one main idea each, and a concluding summary.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express complex ideas. Phrases like 'do funny activities' and 'it is not feel like cinematic' are unnatural and imprecise. There is a lack of variety in word choice, and some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'it valuable for a monthly'. To improve, you should focus on learning collocations and more sophisticated vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'social experience', 'technological advancement', or 'financial implications', rather than relying on simple, everyday language.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing subjects or verbs (e.g., 'it is as the same see the to their phone'). Punctuation is largely absent, making it difficult to identify where sentences begin and end. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, error-prone sentences. To improve, you must focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.

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