Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
People are divided into different viewpoint some individual think that in the modern age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. While others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. I believe both views and give own opinion in upcoming paragraphs.
On the one hand , there are primary causes of theatres and cinemas are no important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. firstly , if they have good network they watch online they do not waste money. secondly , they consume time for travel . and they wish with place they are comfortable for watch movie. Therefore, it is benifial for everyone.
On the other hand , there are significant causes theatres and cinemas are still important because if person went outside they know about there culture . and they know more information about there living people . and more entertain outside with friends and relax there mind. Therefore, this is more benefical with these causes .
In conclusion , time consuming , replay and enjoy there comfort place it is causes of online . while , other causes is that know about culture and tradition .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 207 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay addresses both sides of the argument, the points are underdeveloped and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. The position is stated in the introduction but is not consistently maintained or clearly articulated throughout the body paragraphs. The conclusion is also very brief and does not effectively summarize the arguments or provide a final synthesis of the writer's opinion. To improve, the student needs to expand on each point with specific examples and ensure the word count is met.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the repetitive use of 'Therefore' and 'On the one hand/other hand' without smooth transitions between sentences. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by the brevity of the paragraphs and the lack of clear linking between the arguments and the topic sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the argument. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would enhance coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'important', 'good', and 'causes'. There are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'they consume time for travel' instead of 'they save time on travel' and 'there living people' instead of 'their local community'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. To reach a higher band, the student should focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and ensure that words are used in their correct context to convey meaning accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement, such as 'some individual think', and incorrect sentence structures, such as 'I believe both views and give own opinion'. Punctuation is also problematic, with inconsistent spacing before commas and periods. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which are necessary for higher band scores. The student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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