Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-19
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
entertainment paly a crucial role in our life without people feel bored some people believe that due to online apps the cinemas and theatres are alarming rate while other believe that theatres and cinema are important both the statements are explained below with my opinion.
one hand people think online entertainment platforms are better than cinemas and theatres because of online entertainment apps people can easily watch films , series , at home without going to anywhere and also it is comfortable and save time than going to theatres and cinemas . secondly, if people watch film as and another entertainment things through online then travelling expenses also reduce and they can spend that money on other things. moreover, people can spend more time with their family and enjoy watching at home without any difficulty.
on the other hand ,people who believe theatres and cinema are important because it connects the people to their roots and people can know about the traditional ways of watching entrainment. moreover, in cinemas various type of people come and at every action start screaming which is not possible in watching movies online. apart form this , downloading movies net high amount of internet which is more costly than watching movies in cinemas. furthermore, in theatres people play different types of drams such as traditional which connects the people to their roots.
to conclude , according to my opinion watching entertainment by both ways online and in theatres and cinemas have different advantages and disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, though the development is limited. The introduction is somewhat disjointed, and the conclusion fails to clearly state your own opinion, merely noting that both have advantages. While you touch upon economic and cultural aspects, the arguments are underdeveloped. For instance, the claim that downloading movies is more costly than cinema tickets is factually questionable and lacks logical support. To reach a higher band, ensure your position is clearly stated in the introduction and consistently maintained throughout, with each paragraph providing well-supported, logical arguments rather than just listing points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow is often disrupted by mechanical transitions and awkward phrasing. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'on the other hand' and 'moreover', they are sometimes used incorrectly or repetitively. The lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult for the reader to follow the progression of your argument. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the previous one.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'entertainment', 'people', and 'things'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'entertainment paly a crucial role' (play) and 'drams' (dramas). You attempt to use some topic-specific vocabulary, but the lack of precision hinders the sophistication of your writing. To improve, try to incorporate more precise synonyms and collocations related to the topic of media and culture, and pay closer attention to spelling and word forms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect verb forms, and run-on sentences. For example, 'entertainment paly a crucial role in our life without people feel bored' is grammatically incoherent. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, which often forces the reader to re-read sentences to grasp the meaning. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles before attempting more complex grammatical structures.
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