Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
As we know theatres and cinemas play a vital role in country cultures as well as in economy. Some people argues that in today's technology era of life theatres and cinemas are not such initial as people can watch all the entertainments they want on the screen in home. Others say that theatres and cinemas are still necessary for both economically and culturally. I agree with second point also am not disagree with the first point. Let's explain my first view to watching online cause several health issues like, eye problems and too much use of headphones damage ears. Spending more time on the screen one's feel boring and also show exhasted , tired on their face. Secondly, watching online also have some benefits one's see in home as they want like sitting or laying in her or him blanket.
Next comes to the second point that live watching increase our excitement. For instance booking ticket for cinema, go to drive to see the environment also freshen the mood. Clapping and souting boost energy as well as keeps mind happy.
To wach on the big screen it seems that we seen actors on front of use like face face so in this way also level ups to see live for the next time. Aditionally to book a ticket , ready to go on the time, is a sign of punctualist.
In conclusion watching online has some benefits but the physically contains more advantages like health secure as well as economics growth.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views and provides an opinion, but the development is limited. While you mention health issues and the excitement of live venues, the arguments are somewhat superficial and lack depth. For example, the point about 'punctualist' is unclear and does not effectively support the argument regarding the economic or cultural importance of cinemas. The conclusion is brief and does not fully synthesize the points discussed. To improve, ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and provides more detailed, logical explanations for your claims.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical flow between and within them is often disjointed. You use some basic cohesive devices like 'Next comes to' and 'Additionally', but these are used mechanically. The referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the sentence 'one's see in home as they want', which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. Paragraphing is present, but the transition between the discussion of online entertainment and the benefits of physical venues lacks a smooth, cohesive link.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word forms, such as 'not such initial' (instead of 'essential'), 'souting' (shouting), and 'punctualist' (punctuality). You rely on simple, repetitive language, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas clearly. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning collocations and using more precise academic vocabulary to describe the cultural and economic impacts of the arts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('Some people argues'), incorrect article usage, and sentence fragments or run-on sentences. For instance, 'one's feel boring and also show exhasted' contains multiple errors in pronoun usage and adjective choice. While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of prepositions to improve your accuracy.
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