Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-22
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Nowadays, this issue has become one of the most widely discussed topics in modern society. While some people believe that [View A], others argue that [View B]. This essay will discuss both views before explaining why I believe that [your opinion].
First of all, there are several convincing reasons to support this viewpoint. One of the main reasons is that it improves people's quality of life by creating more opportunities and developing important skills. As a result, people can achieve better results and become more productive in their daily lives. Furthermore, it helps individuals prepare for future challenges and contributes to the overall development of society. For example, many people have benefited from this in different ways. Consequently, this brings significant advantages to both individuals and society. This also encourages people to adapt to changing circumstances and develop a more responsible attitude towards their future.
On the other hand, some people believe that this issue may have certain drawbacks, as it can create challenges such as increased costs, stress, or reduced face-to-face communication. However, these problems can often be minimized through proper planning and effective management. In my opinion, the long-term benefits are much more significant than the short-term disadvantages because they contribute to sustainable development and improve people's overall well-being. Nevertheless, these concerns should not prevent society from making progress in this area.
To conclude, although different opinions exist regarding this issue, I firmly believe that my viewpoint is more convincing because it provides long-term benefits for both individuals and society. Therefore, appropriate action should be taken to maximize its positive effects while reducing any possible disadvantages.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0
Javob topshiriqning aniq mavzusini qamrab olmaydi. Siz 'this issue' va 'this viewpoint' kabi iboralarni o'z ichiga olgan umumiy shablonni ishlatgansiz, lekin theatres, cinemas yoki digital age haqida hech narsa demagansiz. Insho ko'rsatmalarda berilgan mavzu bilan bog'liq bo'lmagani uchun, u mavzudan tashqari deb hisoblanadi. Yuqori ball olish uchun dalillaringiz berilgan aniq savolga bevosita aloqador bo'lishini ta'minlashingiz kerak. Siz onlayn o'yin-kulgi qulayligiga qarshi jismoniy joylarning iqtisodiy va madaniy ahamiyatini muhokama qilishingiz kerak, har qanday mavzuga mos keladigan noaniq, almashinuvchan tildan foydalanmasligingiz kerak.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
Insho tuzilish jihatidan mantiqiy tashkil etilgan, aniq kirish, asosiy qism paragraflari va xulosa mavjud. G'oyalaringizni bog'lash uchun 'First of all,' 'Furthermore,' 'On the other hand,' va 'To conclude' kabi bog'lovchi vositalardan foydalanasiz. Biroq, mazmun butunlay umumiy bo'lgani va aniq mavzuga ega bo'lmagani uchun, g'oyalarning rivojlanishi bo'sh tuyuladi. Paragraflarga ajratish yetarli va oqim mexanik jihatdan sog'lom bo'lsa-da, mazmunli tarkibning yo'qligi umumiy izchillikni sun'iy qilib ko'rsatadi. Yaxshilash uchun faqat tarkibiy belgilarga tayanmasdan, topshiriq bilan bog'liq aniq dalillarni bog'lashga e'tibor qarating.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Ishlatilgan lug'at funksional, ammo juda takrorlanuvchi va akademik insho uchun zarur bo'lgan aniqlikdan mahrum. 'convincing reasons,' 'significant advantages,' va 'sustainable development' kabi iboralar haqiqiy mavzudan uzilgan holda ishlatilgan. Ommaviy axborot vositalari, o'yin-kulgi yoki iqtisodiyotga oid mavzuga xos lug'atdan foydalanishga urinish yo'q. Yaxshilash uchun siz aniq topshiriqqa tegishli bo'lgan kengroq lug'at boyligini namoyish etishingiz kerak. 'Shablon' tilidan foydalanishdan saqlaning va buning o'rniga muhokama qilayotgan mavzuga oid aniq atamalardan foydalanishga e'tibor qarating.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5
Grammatik tuzilish odatda aniq va siz gap qurishni yaxshi nazorat qilasiz. Siz 'While some people believe that..., others argue that...' va 'In my opinion, the long-term benefits are much more significant than the short-term disadvantages because they contribute to...' kabi oddiy va murakkab gaplar aralashmasidan foydalanasiz. Grammatik xatolar juda kam va tinish belgilaringiz to'g'ri. Asosiy muammo shundaki, til noaniq, umumiy g'oyalarni ifodalash uchun ishlatiladi. Ushbu tuzilmalarni aniq, mavzuga oid dalillarga qo'llash bo'yicha ko'proq mashq qilsangiz, bu sohadagi ballingiz ancha yuqori bo'ladi.
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