Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-23

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Many people think that digital age is more important than everyting because we can do almost everything in our phone or digital devices . Consequently , people do not care another activities . They can access every film or cinema which they want to watch .

I dissagree with this opinion. Technology is most important discovery in our centruies however we are all human and we need to spend time together . Best way to being together is go to somewhere , especially cinema and theatre .

When you go to this place , you can argue with cinema or theatres topic with your friend . You can eat something and share your emotions about the film. This is beneficial for your mental health .

In addition , these activities are art and if you watch in the real life they will feed your soul . You can learn another culture or aware something about your life and this is the biggest wealth .

However, others argue that home is more comfortable than the out so we should stay at home and watch something in youtube or internet . You will not get tired , also home is quieter than the movie theater . You can spend time by yourself and have a rest in your home. Also You can save money on household expenses. Nevertheless this is not good activity most of the time .

As a result people have a social personality . They should go out and They should experience it in real life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses both views and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited. While you mention that cinemas are beneficial for mental health and 'feed your soul,' these points are not fully supported with specific examples or logical depth. The discussion of the opposing view regarding home comfort is also quite brief. To improve, you should expand on your arguments by explaining 'why' or 'how' these venues are economically or culturally significant, rather than just stating they are important. The response meets the minimum length requirement, but the ideas remain at a surface level.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or repetitive (e.g., 'In addition', 'As a result', 'Also'). There are instances where the transition between sentences is abrupt, such as the jump from discussing mental health to the 'art' of cinema. Referencing is sometimes unclear, and the logical progression of ideas within paragraphs could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'good', 'important', and 'something'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choices, such as 'argue with cinema or theatres topic' and 'aware something about your life'. To achieve a higher score, you should aim to use more precise academic vocabulary and collocations (e.g., 'cultural enrichment' instead of 'feed your soul'). Spelling is generally accurate, but the limited range of vocabulary restricts the ability to convey complex ideas effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The essay uses a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in the real life'), incorrect preposition usage, and subject-verb agreement errors (e.g., 'Technology is most important discovery'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with unnecessary spaces before commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically article usage and verb tenses, before attempting more complex structures.

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