Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-24
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Some people say that in the online systems age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. in my opinion both statements are important in our life because these two things have made much easier and more convenient for us.
To begin with, online systems age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. because nowadays, many people involved online. people can use it easily. you can watch it whenever you want. for example, even if you go to a village far from the city, you can easily access things online.
In other hand, theatres and cinemas are still important because nowadays, even though people are nearby, it feels as if they aren't there. you might watch things online by yourself, but going to the theatres and cinemas with the whole family is a fun experience.
In conclusion, I agree online systems and theatres and cinemas are very important. life is comfortable and enjoyfull. people at these things can learn so much just by locking.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 196 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas, as the arguments are superficial and lack sufficient supporting evidence or examples. While you address both sides of the prompt and provide a personal opinion, the discussion is underdeveloped. To improve, you must expand on your points by explaining the 'why' and 'how' behind your arguments, ensuring each paragraph provides a thorough exploration of the topic rather than just stating general observations.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which is a positive start. However, the logical progression of ideas is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'In other hand', 'To begin with'). Some sentences lack clear connections, making the flow feel disjointed. To achieve a higher score, you should use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple terms like 'things', 'online', and 'important'. There is little evidence of less common or academic vocabulary. Phrases like 'online systems age' and 'enjoyfull' (spelling error) indicate a need for more precise word choice. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific collocations related to media, culture, and economics, and avoid using generic words like 'things' to describe complex concepts.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with sentence structure, punctuation, and capitalization (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and many sentences are simple or fragmented. For example, 'people at these things can learn so much just by locking' is unclear and grammatically incorrect. You need to focus on mastering basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of complex structures like relative clauses or conditional sentences to improve your accuracy and range.
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