Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-08-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
many argued digital era as movie theatres and cinemas are no longer valuable because individual can watch all the entertainment online while others say going out to watch movies and plays play important role in financially and culturally in the society .This easy will discuss both the views along with my own opinion .
firstly ,advancement in technology brings a more comfort in individual life .people can watch movies and plays online in their phones or laptops as watching online is more convinent to people .for example individual who are working everyday and have not enough time to go to the theatres and cinemas can watch the shows online without going out .Also watching online is time and money consuming .
secondly ,Going out in theatres and cinemas make growth in nation both economically and culturally .If we go out in cinemas we can spend time with family and friends and explore .Also when we go out in cinemas we can invest money in buying tickets and also when we go to cinemas we also buy food so eventually its kind of investing money in country .for instance some families are very busy in their busy schedule so when people get day off its a good idea to go out with family and friends to keep their culture and values alive .
thus its very good idea to go out in cinemas and theatres .
my opinion ,in my opinion both plays a significant role in individual life and economically we have to invest both in ourselves and society as if we are busy have not enough time we should watch shows and movies online to entertain ourself as well as its very important to go out so we can spend some time out with friends and family .
conclusion ,Both play important role in people life going out fro explore with friends and family and to contribute in economy of nations and watch online to save time ,energy and travel .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides a clear personal opinion. However, the development of ideas is somewhat superficial. For instance, the economic argument regarding cinemas is limited to the idea of buying tickets and food, which lacks depth. The response covers all parts of the prompt, but the arguments could be more thoroughly extended with more sophisticated reasoning or specific examples. The conclusion is a bit repetitive, and the overall structure is slightly simplistic. To reach a higher band, you should aim to provide more nuanced explanations for why these venues remain culturally significant beyond just 'keeping values alive'.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the progression of ideas. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive. Phrases like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'thus' are used, but there is a lack of sophisticated linking words or referencing to connect ideas more fluidly. The paragraphing is present, but the transitions between sentences within paragraphs are sometimes abrupt. Improving the variety of cohesive devices and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear, unified focus would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task but lacks the range and precision required for higher bands. There is frequent repetition of basic words like 'go out', 'cinemas', 'theatres', and 'online'. Some word choices are slightly unnatural, such as 'time and money consuming' (which should be 'time-saving and cost-effective') and 'make growth in nation'. While the meaning is clear, the lack of variety and occasional inaccuracies in collocation prevent the response from reaching a higher band. You should focus on learning synonyms and more academic collocations to express your ideas more precisely.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout. Common issues include missing articles (e.g., 'in theatres'), incorrect verb forms (e.g., 'make growth'), and punctuation errors, such as missing spaces after commas and periods. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, you should focus on subject-verb agreement, the correct use of articles, and proofreading for basic punctuation and capitalization errors to ensure your writing is more polished and accurate.
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