Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
In today's rapidly developing world, technology advancement has been made a place in everybody's day by day life. Some people argues that in the current digitalisation era, theatres and cinemas have no place in the society, where everything is easily available on the internet. It can be seen that, to run the economy smoothly with no culture differences, cinemas and theatres like Imax and showbiz are equivalent important to digital world.
To begin with, internet has became a special place in day to day routine of every individual. To make the things done, everyone has access to digital world, where they are easily browse and watch anything, at any point of time during the day. For instance, fast and furious, a well owned movie of car racing is trending globally because of it popularity among all the age group of people. Although, the movie made in a different country, but because of the facility of internet, anyone could easily enjoy the facility of interest sitting in the corner of any place around the globe.
To make the movie or films precisely on the biography of certain people, it cost hefty of money of production house, to recover the amount, they offer to play it on big theatres and on screen for wide majority of people to watch at the single time altogether rather than sitting and watching at different time. Movies from different culture and country, depicts option to learn and understood diverse food culture, dressing sense, work-life balance though movie which majority of people cannot get primary experience by themselves. For instance, Japanese "Kung Fu" movie, playing in the Indian theatres, to show how discipled and
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both sides of the argument and provides an opinion, though the development is uneven. The first body paragraph focuses on the internet, while the second attempts to discuss the importance of cinemas. However, the essay ends abruptly mid-sentence, leaving the final argument and conclusion incomplete. This lack of a clear conclusion and the unfinished nature of the final paragraph significantly impact the development of ideas. To improve, ensure that each point is fully supported with a clear link to the prompt and that the essay reaches a logical conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with' and 'For instance', but the flow is often disrupted by awkward phrasing and incomplete thoughts. Paragraphing is present, but the abrupt ending of the final paragraph makes the overall structure feel unfinished. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the phrase 'anyone could easily enjoy the facility of interest', which lacks a clear antecedent. To improve, focus on using a wider range of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence and a logical progression of ideas leading to a conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'technology advancement has been made a place' instead of 'technology has found a place' and 'hefty of money' instead of 'a hefty amount of money'. Some phrases are repetitive or unnatural, such as 'well owned movie'. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations, and ensure that words are used in their correct grammatical form.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('Some people argues'), incorrect verb tenses ('internet has became'), and missing articles or prepositions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the essay from reaching a higher band. Focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that complex sentences are constructed accurately.
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