Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Nowadays some people believe that theaters and cinemas are no longer important as people but cinemas and is the best way to congume best gernal konwlage so i discussed some ponit of view on this statement
To bigen with me. Cinema is best for digital age individuals because some individuals are dipras for thare life so thaye are isliye watch life related movies so they are got motivation for thare life and some people watch thare old society movies and old era history so they are got old era history and knowledge how to work old era individuals.
On the other hand. Some individuals watching movies for thare time so they are bonk thare college and school and watching movies this is the wrong way because they are westing thare time and some people watching voilans movies so get motivation and they are involved big crimes like tarist atack and robri modrung.
In conclusion. In my prospective motivation and educational movies are better for digital age individuals because voilans movies give people motivation and they are involved big crimes.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 179 words. This significantly impacts the development of ideas. While the essay attempts to address both sides of the argument, the points are underdeveloped and lack depth. The position is somewhat unclear, and the arguments regarding 'violent movies' leading to 'terrorist attacks' are extreme and lack logical support. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and ensure you reach the required length to fully explore the prompt.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is very limited and often mechanical (e.g., 'To bigen with', 'On the other hand'). The transition between ideas is abrupt, and the lack of clear topic sentences makes it difficult to follow the argument. The conclusion does not effectively summarize the points made but rather introduces a repetitive thought. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph focuses on a single, well-developed idea will enhance the overall flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally impede understanding (e.g., 'bigen', 'dipras', 'isliye', 'westing', 'voilans', 'tarist', 'modrung'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express complex ideas effectively. You rely on simple, everyday words and struggle to use academic or topic-specific terminology. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to the topic of media and culture, and pay closer attention to spelling and word choice to ensure your meaning is conveyed accurately.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors in basic grammar, such as subject-verb agreement, tense usage, and sentence structure (e.g., 'they are isliye watch', 'they are got motivation'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of full stops. The frequent errors often make the text difficult to read and understand. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence structures, subject-verb agreement, and consistent verb tenses before attempting more complex grammatical forms.
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