Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
An often debated topic whether the cinemas and theaters are still important or not. Therefore,many people believe that they can entertain themselves online without a physical experience of a cinema or theater while other insist that the cinema are precious in terms of economy and culture. I will discuss this argument with both prospective and then conclude my own opinion.
On the very first hand ,the cinemas and theaters are a source of income of any country as well as a source of entertainment. Watch something live and on a big screen enhance a person's experience.For instance ,many countries have theaters where shows like comedy and cultural re-presenters helds, and many wealthy people pay physical visit there.These theaters provides a major turn over in the terms of wealth of a country,even though we can see that kind of things online.So at first it provides a wider experience of a movie or show,they also pay taxes to governamnt of a country and they will invest more in return.However, it can be a time consumer in a person's busy life.
On the other hands,in today's world where technologies has made a lot impacts on people's behaviors and their daily life.Many people prefer themselves to go through the internet if they have to entertain themselves instead of paying a visit. This also have positive aspects,for instance, in today's world people are running through the rat races so one cannot get some time to watch his favorite movie or a show,first buy a ticket and then drive at a distance to the cinema even though he can have that online through his phone.
In conclusion, both have its own positive and negative aspects.I will chose a cinema fo
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses both sides of the argument and attempts to provide an opinion. However, the essay is incomplete, ending abruptly in the final paragraph. While the prompt is addressed, the lack of a full conclusion and the limited development of ideas—particularly the economic arguments—prevent a higher score. The position is stated but not fully sustained due to the unfinished nature of the text. To improve, ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully explored and that the essay reaches a logical, complete conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay uses basic paragraphing and some cohesive devices like 'On the very first hand' and 'However'. However, the flow is often mechanical, and some transitions are awkward or misused, such as 'On the very first hand' (which is not standard English). The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the abrupt ending significantly disrupts the overall coherence of the piece. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, logical progression that leads to a finished conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks precision and sophistication. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'cultural re-presenters' and 'running through the rat races'. Some word choices are repetitive or imprecise, such as 'that kind of things'. While the meaning is generally clear, the range is limited, and the errors in collocation occasionally draw attention. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and collocations appropriate for a formal discussion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('theaters provides', 'technologies has made'), punctuation errors (spacing after commas), and awkward sentence construction ('An often debated topic whether...'). While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, consistent verb tense usage, and correct punctuation, particularly regarding spacing after commas and periods.
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