Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Is interesting to see that kind views like in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment the want online.For this point, i rather say, IMAX movie can only displayed in cinema, where have special screen and tape discord player, and only in theatres can watch real human acting. Is not to deny nowadays are easily to find entertainment online like video games and tv shows, but some kind digital sources can find on internet were screen by camera, phones, and uploading on the internet for online watching, but with no doubt we can chat all over the world, share commons and felling for things that we like.

And i would fully support for theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally, for one shows in both place, it will cost abundant fees for electric, like lamps, air-conditioner and the screen displayed outside. For culturally it can not replace with anything, in these two places people can face to face watch variety kinds shows or movies, and also welcoming for dating, financial meeting, hanging with our best friends. The rapid growth internet entertainment brings a take-out and seat down ways for people using phones and computers, internet is convenience should not be reasons addicted and rely on. We shall remember where the entertainment culture real begins originally, for somebody far from us, we can play online with them, do not forget out-line life that we have, because all the beautiful memory come from reality life.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address both views regarding the importance of theatres and cinemas versus online entertainment, and it provides a personal opinion in support of their continued cultural and economic significance. However, the development of ideas is limited and often unclear due to expression issues. For instance, the writer mentions that IMAX movies can only be displayed in cinemas with special screens, and touches upon economic factors like electric fees, but these points are under-developed and lack clear logical expansion. The position is discernible, but the overall task coverage remains at a Band 5 level because the arguments are disjointed, repetitive, and lack the depth expected for higher band scores.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organization of the text suffers from poor paragraphing and a lack of clear overall progression. The response is divided into only two long paragraphs, and the transitions between ideas are abrupt and confusing. For example, starting with 'Is interesting to see that kind views like...' immediately sets a disjointed tone. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'For this point, i rather say' and 'And i would fully support for theatres and cinemas'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of argument. This level of organization aligns with Band 4 descriptors.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, with frequent inaccuracies that strain the reader's comprehension. Examples of weak or incorrect phrasing include 'tape discord player', 'were screen by camera', and 'take-out and seat down ways'. The writer attempts some less common terms, such as 'abundant fees' and 'economically and culturally', but inappropriate word choices and collocations heavily restrict precision and flexibility. Spelling and word-form errors, such as 'commons and felling' for 'common ground and feeling', place the lexical control firmly at a Band 4 level.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the essay, with a very limited range of structures and frequent intrusive errors. Sentences often lack basic components, such as missing subjects ('Is interesting to see', 'is convenience should not be reasons'), and incorrect verb forms ('can only displayed', 'can not replace with anything'). Punctuation is also problematic, leading to run-on sentences and comma splices, as seen in 'For this point, i rather say, IMAX movie can only displayed in cinema, where have special screen...'. Because errors are frequent, distort meaning in places, and impede smooth communication, the grammar is characteristic of Band 4.

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