Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
This is digital age and everything present online if we want to watch something we only need phone and internet.Todays life is to much busy and we do not have time to go anywhere so it is really helpfull for us to watch anything entertaining online.Some people are introverts and do not feel easy in crowd so it is a plus point for them to feel free and enjoy thier time in calm atmosphere.
If we go in theatres and cinemas we have to pay for tickets and we also need good budget for this tour because now tickets are expensive.
Theatres and cinemas are important for both economically and culturally because jobs are tough in these days and work stress is to much to feel happy and keep our mind active and healthy we need entertainment like enjoy our time beside our busy shedule.Going in these theatres and cinemas help to improve our mental health.
People working in these places have jobs and have a source of earning and artists work in these theatres get paid on their live performences which help them to increase their confidence.Some acts represents our culture and it is really informative and we get information about past.These theatres and cinemas pays tax and help economically for the betterment of the country.
In my opinion theatres and cinemas are very important they play a big role for entertainment industry and people like these alot and preper to go there in thier lesiure time.Big screens in cinemas have its own vibe.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student addresses both views outlined in the prompt and provides a personal opinion in the conclusion, fulfilling the basic requirements of the task. However, the development of ideas is limited and somewhat repetitive. For example, the arguments regarding economic benefits mention taxation and jobs, but these points are surface-level and lack specific elaboration or examples. The viewpoint on online entertainment is briefly touched upon by mentioning convenience and introversion, but it is not fully expanded. The position is discernible in the final paragraph, but overall, the essay tends to over-generalise and lacks the depth expected for higher band scores. This performance aligns best with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows some logical organisation, attempting to group ideas by discussing online entertainment first, followed by the economic and cultural aspects of physical venues, and ending with a personal opinion. However, paragraphing is problematic; the essay features multiple short, disconnected paragraphs that lack cohesive progression. Paragraph boundaries are not managed appropriately to signal shifts in topics, and cohesive devices are either absent or basic, leading to a choppy and repetitive flow. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as pronoun usage in 'Big screens in cinemas have its own vibe.' Consequently, the organisation lacks overall clarity and coherence, fitting the Band 4 descriptor closely.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The student uses a limited, basic vocabulary range that is minimally adequate to discuss the topic. Words and phrases like 'digital age', 'entertainment', 'expensive', and 'mental health' are repetitive and show a lack of precision. There are numerous instances of incorrect word choice, unnatural collocation, and spelling errors, such as 'helpfull', 'to much busy', 'shedule', 'performences', and 'preper'. These lexical inadequacies and frequent spelling mistakes cause some difficulty for the reader and constrain the expression of ideas. This places the lexical performance firmly at Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The writing relies heavily on simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions or run-on structures without appropriate punctuation, as seen in 'This is digital age and everything present online if we want to watch something we only need phone and internet.' Attempts at complex structures are frequently faulty and lack punctuation, leading to persistent errors in basic grammar, subject-verb agreement, and articles. Punctuation is largely neglected, resulting in fused sentences and comma splices throughout the text. These frequent errors cause strain and difficulty for the reader, matching the standard described for Band 4.
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