Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is often argued that in the digitalised world,theaters and cinema are of less importance as people can watch all entertainment at home while others argued that theaters and cinemes are an inportant part of culture and economic.in my opinion chnage of airspace is very important cinemas and theaters can chnage your airspace and you can more likely to enjoy the entertainment by being around people and have feeling,.

due to the digitalisation of the world everything is available on all ott platforms at home. you can can be in your comfy pajamas and watch whatever you want for instance there is saving of your time and petrol by just been in your home and wat ch whatever you want you can have your your lesiure time at anytime you dont have to be in long que evething is just a click away.subsequently yes theaters ad cimenemas are less likely important because you can have every sort of digital shows at home

on the other ther are likely more important because theater and cinema gives you the airspace and environmrent where you can connect more closely to the emotions of shows that has been conveyed for instance it gives ypu a proper plannig and an environment to enjoy particularly a show went watch ashow you get to connect alot of differen people learn about different perspectives about the show as aresult cinema and theraters culturally helps you to bond with like minded individuals

to conclude this cinemas and theeaters are more likely very important as it gives busineess to the entertanment industry cultraly it connect like minded people its been a leisure place for people

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The student addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views—the digital convenience argument and the cultural-economic value argument—while also providing a clear personal opinion. The position is maintained throughout the essay. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited and repetitive, particularly in the body paragraphs where concepts like airspace and enjoyment are re-stated without deep extension. For instance, the mention of connecting with different people is introduced but not fully elaborated with strong specific examples. While the overall task requirements are met, the depth of idea extension aligns more closely with a Band 6.0 descriptor.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The text demonstrates a basic level of organisation, and the overall progression can be followed. However, paragraphing and cohesive devices are severely lacking. The student fails to use proper capitalisation and punctuation to separate sentences and paragraphs effectively, resulting in run-on structures like in the phrase 'industriy cultraly it connect like minded people its been a leisure place'. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive transitions such as 'for instance' and 'subsequently'. Paragraphing is minimal and poorly managed, which heavily disrupts the logical flow of the arguments and places this criterion firmly at Band 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is generally basic and repetitive, with numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text. Words like 'theaters', 'cineme', 'inportant', 'chnage', 'que', 'evething', 'cultraly', and 'entertanment' demonstrate persistent spelling issues. While the student attempts some less common vocabulary items such as 'digitalised', 'airspace', and 'perspective', inaccurate collocations and awkward phrasing—such as 'chnage of airspace'—impede clarity. The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but errors are frequent enough to restrict the score to a Band 5.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is limited, consisting largely of simple sentences or poorly linked clauses that lack punctuation. There is a complete absence of capital letters at the beginning of sentences and proper nouns, and periods are frequently omitted between independent clauses, leading to fused sentences. While there are some attempts at complex structures using subordinators like 'because' and 'as', these are often grammatically faulty or incorrectly punctuated. Frequent structural errors and punctuation failures cause considerable difficulty for the reader, placing this performance at a Band 4.0.

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