Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In the modern era, severals people think taht in the digitall age, theatres and cinemas are no longer crucial as individuals can seen all the entertainment they want online. on the other people argue that theatres and cinemas are still crucial both economically and culturally. i think that both people are equally right but i argye that theaters and cinemas are still important bothe economically and culturally.
There are severals imporant in watching the digital age it has been more benefit in the society or nation.firstly, economically has extremly benefits for watching the theatres and cinemas because the if people watching the digitals age grow up the money and so that points are basicallly important is theatres and cinemas income the money and investement the other movie or that's type of things. economicall strongs in this field grow the GDP in our country so that the economically strongs it has been develop in the infrastructure, educatation, turisms and manys field we are invest so that it is benificial.
On the other hand. another crucial benifit is culturally. how to develop the culutre?
in the field of culture more people was the cinemas and theatres are longer time on the same coutry and country side to spreade the this movies cultural clips and follow the culture. one country culture spread in the another country and movie origin country rich in the field of culture or traditional. for the example, one culture movie seen in the another country or place people seen the culture and learin the new culture.
In conclusion, some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are still important both economiucally and culturally. in my opinion , it is the many benefit on the field of cinemas and theatres.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views on the importance of theatres and cinemas in the digital age and providing an opinion. However, the development of ideas is heavily constrained by severe language limitations. The points regarding economic benefits (such as GDP and infrastructure) and cultural exchange are introduced but remain under-developed and difficult to follow due to poor expression and repetition. The writer states their position in the introduction and reiterates it in the conclusion, meeting the baseline requirements for this criterion. Nevertheless, because the reasoning lacks clarity and depth, it aligns best with the Band 5 descriptor where ideas are limited and under-developed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The essay is divided into an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion, showing an attempt at paragraphing. However, logical progression is severely disrupted throughout the text. Cohesive devices are either misused or absent, as seen in awkward transitions like 'On the other people argue' and 'There are severals imporant in watching the digital age'. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it hard to follow the relationship between sentences and ideas. For instance, the transition into the cultural paragraph ('On the other hand. another crucial benifit is culturally. how to develop the culutre?') lacks appropriate linking and punctuation. These issues place the response firmly at Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily repetitive, with constant misspellings and incorrect word forms ('severals', 'taht', 'digitall', 'seen' instead of 'see', 'argye', 'bothe', 'turisms', 'manys'). There are numerous collocation errors, such as 'income the money and investement the other movie' and 'economicall strongs in this field grow the GDP'. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for discussing academic topics effectively. Communication is significantly strained and impeded by these numerous lexical and orthographic errors, which corresponds directly to the Band 4 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that are consistently faulty. There are persistent, fundamental errors in subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, word order, and punctuation (such as lowercase beginnings of sentences, stray full stops, and comma splices). Examples include 'severals people think', 'individuals can seen', 'if people watching the digitals age grow up the money', and 'more people was the cinemas'. Error-free sentences are exceedingly rare, and the density of grammatical mistakes frequently distorts the intended meaning, matching the criteria for Band 4.
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