Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-20
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
According to the people, theatres and cinemas importance are reduce because people can watch all the entertainment online. Other people think that economical and cultural side thaeatres are still important. While I oppose of the first group of people, the idea of the second group of people seems worth supporting for me.
On the one hand, we all know that today, technology continious developing day to day, along with this, AI is also developing and people can create short video or change pictures and places with it. In short, people do anything they want with AI. This development cause reduce several jobs, for example, video editor, director, producer, actor and actress. Theatres and cinemas are help people to understand easily about history and human nature and other cultural things. Thus , we not allow lose of theatres and cinemas importance.
On the other hand,
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
Javob talab qilingan minimal 250 so'z o'rniga atigi 144 so'zni o'z ichiga olgan holda juda qisqa. Shu sababli, topshiriq faqat qisman bajarilgan va taqdim etilgan g'oyalar o'ta cheklangan hamda yetarli darajada rivojlantirilmagan holda qolgan. Talaba kirish qismida ikkala qarashni tanishtirishga harakat qilgan bo'lsa-da, asosiy qism paragraflari vaqtidan oldin tugab qoladi va yakunda tugallanmagan ikkinchi asosiy qism paragrafiga ('On the other hand, ...') olib keladi. Hech qanday xulosa taqdim etilmagan, ya'ni talabaning o'z shaxsiy fikri matn davomida to'liq qo'llab-quvvatlanmagan yoki kontekstga kiritilmagan. Bu javobning to'liq emasligi va so'z soni talabini sezilarli darajada bajarmagani tufayli Task Achievement bo'yicha pastroq bahoga loyiq ko'rilishini talab qiladi.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
Javob standart kirish qismi va alohida asosiy qism paragraflarini yaratishga harakat qilib, ma'lum bir tashkiliy tuzilmani namoyish etadi. Biroq, matnning tugallanmagan oxiri tufayli umumiy rivojlanish keskin to'xtatilgan. Bog'lovchi vositalar minimal darajada va ba'zida g'ayritabiiy, masalan, gapni 'Thus , we not allow lose...' bilan boshlash kabi. Paragraflarga bo'lishga harakat qilingan, ammo ikkinchi asosiy qism paragrafi faqat o'tish iborasidan iborat oddiy parcha sifatida qoldirilgan. Havola qilish ba'zida noaniq va to'liq rivojlantirilgan dalil yoki xulosaning yo'qligi izchillik standart insho tuzilmasi bo'ylab saqlanib qolishi mumkin emasligini anglatadi.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Qo'llanilgan lug'at juda oddiy va takrorlanuvchi. Matndagi misollarga 'importance', 'entertainment', 'develop' va 'people' kabi so'zlar kiradi. 'theatres and cinemas importance are reduce', 'economical and cultural side' va 'cause reduce several jobs' kabi sezilarli so'z tanlash va birikma xatolari mavjud. Talaba 'economical', 'cultural' kabi topshiriqqa oid kamroq uchraydigan ba'zi so'zlarni ishlatishga harakat qiladi va 'director' hamda 'producer' kabi kasblarni tilga oladi, ammo tez-tez uchraydigan lug'aviy xatolar va cheklangan doirasi ballni cheklaydi. Imlo asosan qoniqarli, ammo aniq lug'aviy nazorat butun matn davomida yetishmaydi.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
Javob grammatik tuzilmalarning juda cheklangan doirasini namoyish etadi. Oddiy gaplar ustunlik qiladi va murakkab tuzilmalarga urinishlar tez-tez xato bo'lib chiqadi, masalan, 'While I oppose of the first group of people, the idea of the second group of people seems worth supporting for me.' gapida bo'lgani kabi. Matn davomida tez-tez uchraydigan grammatik xatolar, jumladan zamonlarni noto'g'ri ishlatish ('technology continious developing'), yordamchi fe'llarning tushib qolishi ('we not allow lose') va noto'g'ri ko'makchilar ('oppose of') mavjud. Bu xatolar ba'zida o'quvchi uchun qiyinchilik tug'diradi va oddiy gap mexanikasini zaif nazorat qilishini ko'rsatadi.
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