Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-29

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Nowadays, due to rapid digitalization theatres and cinemas were higly affected due to the fact that people can already watch all the entertainment they want online. While others argue that theatres and cinemas are still vital economically and culturally. In this essay, both views will be discussed and I will give own opinion in the end of discussion.

Certainly, rapid growth of digital age slows down the market for theatres and cinemas globally. People can now watch any entertainment shows in the comfort of their homes without spending much. A lot of applications online offers lower cost for the use of their apps to view different entertainment sites,some are even free. People can now view different movies at the same time. This phenomenon hinders family to bond with each other frequently unlike before.

On the other hand, others argue the importance of theatres economically and culturally. In the past, malls with cinemas and theatres are flocked by families every weekend after church because they want to watched a movie after a long week of work and studies making the familiy ties better and will give them a chance to have a conversation face to face.If it still continue up to this day it will help the cinema and theatres generate more sales and jobs.

In conclusion, i believe that both views are important. In this modern society we need a balance for everything. Therefore, in a daily basis we can watch movies or videos using the different applications available online to save money. However,we also need time to ineract with our family, so we can go in cinemas to watch movie with the whole family to foster good relationship and create a bond where we can start a conversation to know what happened to each member of the family for the whole week. This way we can save money, build good relationship with family while helping other business to prosper.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

Tinutugon ng tugon ang lahat ng bahagi ng prompt sa pamamagitan ng pagtalakay sa parehong mga pananaw—ang decline ng cinemas dahil sa digitalization at ang patuloy na economic at cultural importance nito—habang naglalahad din ng malinaw na personal na opinyon. Ang mga ideya ay pangkalahatang may kaugnayan, ngunit ang development ay medyo limitado at paulit-ulit, lalo na sa body paragraphs kung saan ang mga punto tungkol sa family bonding at cost ay restated nang walang makabuluhang extension. Halimbawa, ang mention ng families visiting malls after church ay isang magandang specific detail, ngunit ang pangkalahatang elaboration ay may tendency na bumalik sa parehong mga ideya tungkol sa saving money at interacting with family. Ang mas mataas na band score ay mangangailangan ng mas malalim na exploration ng economic implications, tulad ng job creation at urban regeneration, sa halip na umasa panguna sa social angles. Gayunpaman, ang task ay maayos na naisagawa na may malinaw na position na maintained sa kabuuan.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

Ang sanaysay ay may coherent overall arrangement at sumusunod sa isang lohikal na istruktura na may introduction, dalawang body paragraphs na nagtatanghal ng opposing views, at conclusion. Ang paragraphing ay ginagamit nang naaangkop upang paghiwalayin ang mga ideya. Gayunpaman, ang cohesion sa loob ng sentences at paragraphs ay paminsan-minsang faulty o mechanical. Halimbawa, ang transition na 'On the other hand, others argue the importance of theatres economically and culturally' ay awkwardly na nagpapakilala sa ikalawang pananaw, at ang referencing ay minsan imprecise, tulad ng 'If it still continue up to this day'. Naroroon ang cohesive devices ngunit maaari itong maging repetitive o medyo unnatural sa context. Nakikita ang overall progression, ngunit smoother transitions at mas sophisticated signposting ang kakailanganin upang maabot ang mas mataas na band.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

Gumagamit ang mag-aaral ng adequate range ng vocabulary para sa task, na matagumpay na nagpaparating ng mga puntong may kaugnayan sa digitalization, entertainment, at family bonding. Sinusubukan ang less common vocabulary items, tulad ng 'digitalization', 'global globally', 'phenomenon', at 'prosper', ngunit may mga kapansin-pansing inaccuracies sa word choice at form, kabilang ang 'higly affected', 'shows' na pinagsama sa 'online offers', at 'ineract'. Nagaganap din ang spelling errors tulad ng 'familiy' at capitalization slips tulad ng 'i believe' at 'However,we'. Bagama't ang mga error na ito ay hindi seriously humahadlang sa communication, nililimitahan nito ang lexical score sa Band 6 level, dahil ang flexibility at precision sa less common lexical items ay inconsistent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

Ang tugon ay nagpapakita ng mix ng simple at complex sentence structures, na sinusubukan ang complex forms na may clauses ng time at condition, tulad ng 'While others argue that theatres and cinemas are still vital economically and culturally.' Gayunpaman, ang frequent grammatical errors ay naroroon sa buong teksto, lalo na tungkol sa tense consistency ('theatres and cinemas were higly affected', 'If it still continue'), subject-verb agreement ('A lot of applications online offers'), at missing prepositions o articles ('give own opinion in the end of discussion', 'go in cinemas to watch movie'). Ang punctuation slips, tulad ng missing spaces after commas, ay evident din. Bagama't ang mga error na ito ay hindi nagiging dahilan upang hindi maintindihan ng reader ang message, binabawasan nito ang proportion ng error-free sentences.

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