Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-09-30
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In modren era we can see all group of age people have phones laptops and they all have access of social media and internet due to busy scedual they dont have time to go outside for the movie or someting like that so they prefer to watch online on there phones or laptops.
After that yes some people say that in the digital age theaters i agree cinemas are no longer as people can watch all the entertainment becuse they want online becuse they dont have time due to busy schedule they all are strugling and fighting with time from my perspective if i am doing a 8 to 9 hours job in any corporate office so after finishing the shift due to lack of energy and shortage of time i dont have any motivation to go out for the cenima entertainment movie or somthing like that .
Yes i also agree with this statment theaters and cinemas are still importent becuse in early ages people dont have phones or any social media at that time the only sorce of entertainment is cinemas and theaters and they remind us the history and they are also importent both ecnomically and culturally becuse from cinemas are important becuse they are performaing the importent role in economy for watching movies people spend handsome amond and cinemas also provides jobs for unemployed persons .
Theater is a very old resorce of entertainment its our haritage so we have to maintaine our theater culture alive becuse it reminds us where all the entertainment come from.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views (online entertainment vs. traditional cinemas and theatres) and includes the writer's own opinion. However, the development of ideas is limited and repetitive, particularly regarding the lack of time and busy schedules. For instance, the writer states, 'due to busy scedual they dont have time to go outside... so they prefer to watch online,' and repeats this exact sentiment when discussing their personal experience. The position is somewhat clear, but ideas lack the necessary extension and depth expected for higher bands. It meets the criteria for Band 5, as the task is addressed, but the arguments remain underdeveloped and overly simplistic.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers significantly from a lack of proper paragraphing and punctuation. The entire response is essentially one long run-on sentence structure in places, with minimal use of periods or commas to separate distinct thoughts. For example, the sentence starting with 'After that yes some people say...' continues for over fifty words without proper terminal punctuation. Transitional markers are basic or misused, such as 'After that yes', and cohesive devices are generally inadequate and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'because' and 'and'. While there is a loose overall arrangement presenting the student's ideas, the lack of mechanical control over structure and paragraphing pulls the coherence down to a Band 4.0 level.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily impacted by spelling errors throughout the response. Examples of misspelled words include 'modren', 'scedual', 'becuse', 'strugling', 'cenima', 'somthing', 'statment', 'importent', 'sorce', 'ecnomically', 'performaing', 'amond', and 'haritage'. The student attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'economically and culturally' and 'unemployed persons', but the high frequency of lexical and spelling errors noticeably strains the reader and impedes fluent communication. This places the lexical performance firmly at Band 4.0, as the vocabulary is limited and basic errors are pervasive.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is very limited, relying almost exclusively on long, run-on coordinate clauses joined by conjunctions like 'and' or causal markers like 'because', entirely lacking proper sentence boundaries and capitalization in places. There is an absence of complex structures demonstrating good control. Grammatical errors are extremely frequent, including subject-verb agreement issues ('cinemas are important because they are performaing') and fragment-like structures. Punctuation is virtually absent, leading to a stream-of-consciousness style of writing that causes persistent difficulty for the reader. These issues align with the descriptors for Band 4.0.
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