Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Some individual argue with that in the digital age,theatres and cinemas are no longer crucial as pepole can see all entertainment they want online,when other citizenship say that threaters and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.This topic will discuss on both views with my opinion.
On the one hand,some individual argue with that theatres and cinemas are not crucial as this generation, as citizenship can watch all the entertainment what they want online.there are several reasons why people are argue that, they can easily watch the what they want to watch in home,while travelling with comfortable and easily.they can watch vedios,flims,sports, whatever they want easily watch it with paying money through online.for example,my friend had always watche what she wanted in netflix. its little expensive but itts very easy to use and watched what she want.she can easily search on her phone to see entertainments,movies,sports.but one negotive reason ia that its expensive and nif you watch in your mobile phone while you travelling then currently your mobile charged was declined that moment your money was gone.
On the other hand,many individuals argue with that theatres and cinemas are still important in both economically and culturally ia mean that, yah its digital age but econmically
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 3.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5
The response addresses the prompt partially by attempting to discuss both views regarding the role of theatres and cinemas versus online entertainment, but it trails off incomplete in the second body paragraph. While the writer states that they will discuss both views and give their opinion in the introduction, the ideas remain heavily under-developed, repetitive, and disjointed. Furthermore, the response fails to meet the minimum length requirement of 250 words, as it contains only 206 words. The position is not fully articulated or supported, and the sudden cessation of the text prevents any proper conclusion or balanced evaluation of the economic and cultural aspects mentioned.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is some basic organization attempted with transitional markers such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', but the overall progression lacks clarity and logical flow. Paragraphing is poorly executed, with the second body paragraph cutting off mid-sentence and failing to develop a cohesive argument. Referencing is frequently unclear, using vague pronouns like 'it' and 'they' without clear antecedents. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and repetitive manner, such as the constant repetition of 'easily watch', which hinders the smooth progression of ideas throughout the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, featuring frequent word-choice errors and spelling mistakes such as 'pepole', 'threaters', 'vedios', 'flims', and 'negotive'. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, but these attempts are marred by inaccurate collocations and inappropriate forms, such as 'charged was declined'. While meaning can sometimes be extracted despite the numerous lexical inaccuracies, the restricted range and persistent errors significantly constrain the effectiveness of the communication.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The grammatical range is extremely limited, relying heavily on faulty attempts at complex sentences. There are frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation throughout the text, exemplified by structures like 'Some individual argue with that' and 'people are argue that'. Punctuation and capitalization are erratic, and run-on sentences appear frequently due to missing spaces after commas and periods. These persistent errors cause frequent strain and difficulty for the reader.
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