Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

some individual are in the favor of having the traditional mean of watcing drama movies etch through cinema and theraters but on the other hand many people says that it is meaning less to invest the money on these .both type of people are write at their own places but in my opinion we should have these old means why i m saying this so yeah i have a critical thinking behind it as many people still are not able to use the technology properly the even find it difficult to text their closest one so how they would be able to download a drama even how they could search a drama in the search bar morever many films or drama are not avalible free online we have to pay some money for them so instead of payng money for that subscription people find it better to spend that money while watching the same things on big screen with their loved ones morever it is the fantasy of some peoples to see the thong on a big scree as present in the cinema as i also have ths audacity .it is not about watching the movie or film but it all depends on whom you are watching it with many people make this a reason to unite with others and spend good moments and make memories as sometime a long distance freinds make a plan of watching a drama on theater or a series in cinema if this will get closed then how that freinds will meet each other how they will get a rid of their grinding schedules so yeah in my opinion its a sort of cultural heritage we should take care about it so the next generations will see that how their ancestors used to get entertained

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your response addresses the task partially by discussing both views on traditional cinemas versus online streaming and providing your own opinion. However, your ideas are limited and under-developed. For instance, while you mention that many people cannot use technology properly or that online streaming is not always free, these points are presented as a continuous string of loosely connected thoughts rather than fully explored arguments. To reach a higher level, you need to present a clearer position throughout the essay and extend your main ideas with more substantial explanations and relevant examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Your text struggles with information and ideas not being arranged coherently. A major issue is the complete absence of paragraphing; the entire essay is written as one single, long block of text. Furthermore, your use of cohesive devices is inadequate and repetitive, heavily relying on words like 'morever' and 'so yeah' to link ideas. There is a lack of clear overall progression, which makes it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of your arguments. To improve, you must organise your writing into distinct paragraphs—such as an introduction, body paragraphs for each view, your opinion, and a conclusion—and use a wider variety of appropriate cohesive links.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use a limited but minimally adequate range of vocabulary for this task, with noticeable errors that cause some difficulty for the reader. There are numerous spelling and word-form errors throughout your response, such as writing 'watcing' instead of watching, 'theraters' instead of theaters, 'avalible' instead of available, and 'payng' instead of paying. You also use colloquial or informal phrases like 'so yeah' and 'thong on a big scree' which are inappropriate for an academic essay. To achieve a higher score, you should expand your vocabulary range, use less common lexical items accurately, and carefully check your spelling.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Your writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of run-on sentences joined by conjunctions like 'and' or 'so'. There is a complete lack of standard punctuation, such as capital letters at the beginning of sentences and full stops to separate independent clauses, which makes the text feel like one endless sentence. Frequent errors in verb forms, tense consistency, and basic sentence construction cause considerable difficulty for the reader. To improve, you need to practice forming separate, complete sentences with correct punctuation, and work on reducing grammatical errors by using a better mix of simple and complex structures.

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