Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-01
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The discussion is about the importance of theatres and cinemas,I agree with this point that in the digital age,theatres and cinemas are no longer important therefore people can watch all the entertainment they want online.
Threates and cinemas plays an important role ,because through this people can entertain and spend their time for watching different movies.but if we talk about in the past time theatres and cinemas are most popular for entertaining ,at that time people was going for threates to do acting ,make people entertain,also for watching the movies ,But now everything are changed , In digital age people prefer to sit at homes and watching different stuffs online through their mobile phones,laptops,computers, now everyone have alot of resources to watch their programs online while in the comfort zone,now there is a wide range of channels for drams,different movies platform like netflix,prime videos, hot star,disney ,people take the subscription and used it for many times and enjoying it for experiencing different platforms.now children are also clever ,so this generation are in the favor of online platforms because they want instantly everything what they need.
In conclusion ,now people are busy with their jobs and lifestyles , they dont have time fo spending it on to the cinemas,cinemas concept are not end totally but there is a few people who are in the favor of that ,otherwise large variety of people are the fan of comfort ,time saving ,relaxtion,because through online u watched different things with your favourite on your bed , it can save you fuel also .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response addresses the task only partially. While the writer attempts to discuss both views regarding the relevance of theatres and cinemas in the digital age, the position presented in the introduction is somewhat contradictory, stating an agreement with the decline of cinemas while the body paragraphs ramble between past and present viewing habits. Ideas are limited and under-developed, relying on repetitive points about convenience and online streaming platforms like Netflix and Disney rather than exploring the broader economic and cultural aspects mentioned in the prompt. To move to a higher band, the writer needs to clearly present a well-developed position throughout the essay and extend both sides of the argument with relevant, detailed explanations and examples.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The essay lacks a clear overall progression, with sentences strung together in a continuous block of text rather than being logically grouped into distinct paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal or inaccurate, leading to run-on sentences and a lack of clear referencing between ideas. For instance, transitional phrases are either misused or absent, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of arguments. To improve, the writer must use paragraphing sufficiently and appropriately, separating the introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, while employing cohesive devices more accurately to link ideas logically.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is limited and repetitive, featuring basic terms such as 'important', 'entertainment', 'movies', and 'online'. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'threates' instead of 'theatres', 'drams' instead of 'dramas', and phrases like 'watch their programs online while in the comfort zone' or 'used it for many times'. These errors and spelling issues sometimes cause difficulty for the reader. To achieve a higher band, the writer should build a wider and more precise range of vocabulary, incorporating less common lexical items with appropriate collocations and paying closer attention to word spelling and formation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences joined loosely by commas or basic conjunctions. Errors are frequent throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'cinemas plays', 'everyone have'), tense consistency (switching between past and present inappropriately), and punctuation. Many attempts at complex sentences result in faulty structures that distort meaning, such as 'now everything are changed' and 'cinemas concept are not end totally'. To progress, the writer needs to demonstrate a greater variety of grammatical structures and improve the overall accuracy of clauses, verb forms, and punctuation so that errors rarely impede communication.
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