Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-03

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

People love to watch movies , series and cartoons on the different ocassion in various places. Some people think we should utilise the technology for all these entertaining activities, they prefer to watch all this stuff online instead of going to cinemas and theatres. While, some oppose this statment and argue that cinemas and theatres are still good in term of financial system and as well as it is a tradition.

The people who believe in the digital world argue that the technology is invented is make things easily accesible for people and one should not have travel several kilometer to entertain himself if all these opportunities are available people in their homes. Whereas, a person privacy is also safe in home and he can a movie of his choice. Additionally they also say that online you can watch movie with your family in home if privacy is concern and as well as the children entertainment.

On the other hand some people still believe in the old culture of watch movies and othe entertaining things in theatre and cinemas. They argue that by this way a person can help his well-being owing to outing a person get some mentally relaxation.However, they do not prefer watching movies online by arguing that cinemas vibes are significantly greater by watching movies and cartoons on a big screen instead of watch on small screens such pcs and laptops. Furthermore they add that cinemas can provide opportunities for a person to create new connections and make friends.

As for as my opinion is concern I slightly agree with both of them because online you can watch any movie you want if you are an introvert but there are some drawbacks, for instance is isolated in this way . While , on the other hand cinema vibes can not be achieved in home, the big screen and a good sound system is far away better then watching online in home or office.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response addresses all parts of the prompt by discussing both views—the digital advancement of entertainment and the enduring economic and cultural value of theatres—while presenting an overall opinion. However, the development of ideas remains limited and under-developed. For instance, the discussion on the financial system is briefly mentioned as 'good in term of financial system' without further elaboration or concrete examples. Similarly, the writer's position, while stated, lacks full extension throughout the body paragraphs. To move to a higher band, the student must provide more fully extended and well-supported arguments for each viewpoint, avoiding sweeping generalisations and grounding the points with specific, developed examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The essay presents a coherent overall arrangement with a clear paragraph-by-paragraph structure that separates the introduction, the two opposing views, and the conclusion. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical and referencing is not always clear, as seen with transitional phrases like 'While, some oppose this statment' and the slightly repetitive use of 'they argue that'. Paragraphing is used sufficiently to divide the central themes, but logical progression between sentences occasionally falters due to awkward transitions. To achieve a higher level of cohesion, the writer needs to employ a wider range of cohesive devices more flexibly and ensure that referencing words link ideas smoothly without disrupting the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is limited but minimally adequate to convey the basic arguments of the task. The writer attempts some less common vocabulary, such as 'accessible', 'introvert', and 'well-being', but there are noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, including 'ocassion', 'statment', 'accesible', and 'mentally relaxation'. These lexical slips and awkward collocations cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a restricted control over word formation. To improve, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary, pay closer attention to spelling and correct word forms, and use phrases more naturally suited to academic writing contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The writing displays a limited range of structures, and attempts at complex sentences are frequently faulty. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, involving verb forms, prepositions, articles, and clause structures, such as 'the technology is invented is make things easily accesible', 'a person privacy is also safe in home', and 'As for as my opinion is concern'. These frequent errors can cause difficulty and strain for the reader. To reach a higher standard, the writer must demonstrate better control over complex sentence patterns, ensure correct subject-verb agreement and article usage, and eliminate basic structural errors to enhance overall readability.

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