Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

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Task 2

The cinemas is no longer

important because the internet

is available widely and

every person have own

screen they can enjoy

the series without booking

the circet tickets and

go there after waiting to

see their favourite films

and also they can enjoy

in their own space in

own comfort room

anytime and anyplace without

spending money more then

enough.

On other side cinemas

are have large screen to

watch film as they

realise because after display

in cinemas then it avabilable

on Internet.

Cinemes have own feeling

where people enjoy with

other on big screen

and have smact snacking

with their family and

friend unlike moblie

screen which have small

visual not more able people

to enjoy the screen of

movies -

They can able discuss the

scene with other people

and have chance to get

other opinions what they

think because everyone's

perspective very and notice

different things which people

not. So It prefer to

enjoy the movies in

cinemas with family and

friend then enjoy own

company in small room. It perfer to treaters to enjoy movies as it release and important to socalize themselve and wide the thought of thinking and get together with family and friends to fad away from own zoon and busy life and spend a good time.

but as every person have asses to internat i think the treaters will not run in future as every person busy in their life and mostly builg their tearter in their home

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both views on cinemas versus online streaming and provides a basic personal opinion. However, the treatment of the task remains limited and under-developed. While the writer touches on arguments regarding cost, comfort, and socialization, the ideas lack sufficient expansion and supportive details. For instance, points about social interaction and economic aspects are stated simply rather than fully explored. The position is visible towards the end, but the overall development suffers from fragmented thoughts and repetitive assertions. To move higher, the response would need to extend each viewpoint with well-developed explanations and specific examples, ensuring every part of the prompt receives thorough and balanced coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

The text demonstrates significant issues with organization and paragraphing. There is a lack of clear overall progression, and ideas jump abruptly between points without smooth transitions, making the text difficult to follow. Paragraphing is highly irregular, with broken sentences and arbitrary line breaks that disrupt the flow of reading. Cohesive devices are either missing, inadequate, or repetitive, such as the frequent reliance on 'and also' or 'on other side'. Pronoun referencing is often unclear, leaving the reader to guess what terms like 'they' or 'it' refer to. To achieve a higher standard, the writer must group related ideas into logical paragraphs, use a wider and more accurate range of cohesive links, and establish a clear progression of thought from the introduction through the arguments to the conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is limited and minimally adequate for expressing basic ideas. The writer attempts some less common terms and topic-related words, such as 'entertainment', 'perspective', and 'socialize', but these are often accompanied by noticeable errors in word choice, spelling, and word form, including 'circet' for tickets, 'avabilable', 'Cinemes', 'smact', 'moblie', and 'treaters'. These lexical inaccuracies and non-standard forms cause some difficulty for the reader and impede smooth communication. To progress, the student needs to expand their range of vocabulary, pay closer attention to correct spelling and word formation, and ensure that words are used in appropriate collocations and contexts.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is restricted, relying mostly on simple and faulty complex sentence structures. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement issues such as 'every person have own screen' and 'cinemas are have', incorrect article usage, missing prepositions, and persistent punctuation flaws. Attempts at complex sentences often result in ungrammatical or run-on structures that obscure the meaning, such as 'It perfer to treaters to enjoy movies as it release and important to socalize themselve'. These frequent errors place a heavy burden on the reader. To improve, the writer must focus on mastering fundamental grammatical patterns, ensuring correct verb forms, pronouns, and pluralization, and constructing sentences with greater accuracy and control.

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