Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Recently, few people believe that in microsoft era, watching refreshment material online is worth considring then going to theatres and cinemas. Some people contradict the statement that theatres and cinemas are still valuable both financially and culturally. However, I believe the same that visiting theatres and cinemas are cruical for both the country and once culture. Both views are discused with examples in detail along with conclusion.
Firstly, time is money and they think once should moved with the advancing technology of science and it's more convinant then going to the theatres and cinemas for enjoyment. For some people their routines are heactic and they don't have energy
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response responds to the task only minimally, failing to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words by stopping abruptly at 108 words. While the introduction attempts to outline both views and gives a personal stance, the body paragraphs are severely incomplete, preventing any meaningful exploration or extension of the ideas. Consequently, the task is addressed only partially, and the discussion of economic and cultural aspects is left undeveloped.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
There is an attempt to impose a basic structure with introductory framing and transition words such as 'Firstly'. However, the information and ideas are not arranged coherently because the essay cuts off mid-sentence in the second paragraph, meaning there is no clear overall progression or conclusion. Paragraphing is also disrupted by the truncated format, and cohesive devices are limited and mechanical, making it difficult for the reader to follow a sustained argument.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, featuring frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and word form that strain the reader's understanding. Examples include 'microsoft era' instead of modern digital era, 'considring', 'cruical', and 'convinant'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'refreshment material' and 'heactic', but these are inaccurate or unnatural in this context, reflecting a limited and minimally adequate lexical range.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on basic patterns with frequent errors that can cause difficulty for the reader. There are noticeable issues with subject-verb agreement and pronoun usage, such as 'few people believe' when intending 'some people believe', and 'once should moved'. Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent, and attempts at complex sentences show a lack of control over tense consistency and auxiliary verbs.
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