Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-06

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Entertainment is necessary for humans.

some public toll that in the morden age, theatres and cinemas are no longer essential as pepople can watch all the enterainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Morden public not interested in cinemas and theatres because they were watched a movies and other entertainment show in online platfrom such as netfilx, hotstar, amazon many more. Digital age people were belived that they were spended a time on home and they were any where any time watched a movie that reasons to they were went online enterainment . Now days, morden people not time to given a cinemas and theatres. They were belived and no time west on theatres and cinemas they were watched on online. They were saved their money and time. They went a online enterainment because they were saffeling a their daily life style and their schedule.

However, others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally. Cinemas are effecte on economically and culturally. Economically and culturally Cinemas are many effets doing such as people are not watch any movies in cinemas goverment and movie makers are not taken profit and they are not made any other movie.Then goverment not collect tax on movie because people not watch movie that reasons tax not collect. Tax is not collect goverment then goverment not given any special work doing and any project doing beacuse their fun not available .People are watch a movie they are understand their culture. culture is important for human . How to people live, what life is , how to make a life with other that all is import for culture and culture show the vaule of life in human.

oveall, morden age people are watch a movie and other show in cinemas because they are understand they culture values and they are helpful and greatful in economy of country. others are belive that economy and culture important for cinrmas it is true.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both sides of the discussion: online viewing is presented as convenient and cheaper, while cinemas are linked to employment, tax revenue and cultural understanding. However, the discussion is only partially developed, which limits how fully the task is answered. The economic explanation becomes difficult to follow in “government not collect tax” and the claim that this prevents public projects, while the cultural point is broad rather than supported with a specific example. Your own position is also unclear: the conclusion says people watch films in cinemas, but earlier you describe them as choosing online entertainment. State your view directly and support each main point with a clear example. The 29 words copied from the task prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is an identifiable structure: an introduction, a paragraph about online entertainment, a paragraph about the continuing value of cinemas, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “However” and “Overall” helps show the intended contrast. Nevertheless, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and ideas are repeated rather than developed—for example, the first body paragraph repeatedly says people watch online to save time and money. Some links between claims are hard to follow, particularly the sequence from tax collection to government projects. Use one clear topic sentence per paragraph, arrange supporting points in a logical order, and make references such as “they” and “that reasons” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “digital age,” “online platform,” “economically,” “culturally,” “tax,” and “culture.” This gives the response a basic range for discussing the question. However, vocabulary is limited and repeated, and frequent spelling, word-form, and collocation errors sometimes make the intended meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “morden,” “enterainment,” “effects doing,” and “saved their money and time.” Choose accurate, natural phrases and check spelling carefully; for instance, describe cinemas as “contributing to the economy” rather than saying they have “many effects doing.” More precise terms for convenience, revenue, and cultural identity would also help you explain your ideas clearly.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect ideas with clauses, as in “because they were watched a movies” and “because people not watch movie that reasons tax not collect,” but these attempts are often faulty. Most sentences rely on a narrow pattern, and frequent problems with tense, verb forms, subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. For example, “people are not watch” needs a correctly formed verb, while “they were spended a time” has an incorrect verb form. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using “because,” “while,” or “which.” Check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly conjugated verb, and use full stops to separate complete ideas.

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