Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-07

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Human development is a complex interplay of many factors. Some indivisuals are of the opinion that digital age,theatres and cinemas are no longer importance as people can watch all the entertainment they all want online.Many people in the past years were went to the cinemas and theatres for their enjoyment many families are going to cinemas and wait fot their favourite actor movies because they do not have any other activities.Moreover peple have to watch the theatre dramas to keep our self happy.In the recent, year people were crazy to watch their super stars on cinemas because there is no source of entertainment esle where on cinemas.Another compelling augumed is that is previous years the people were simple. They dont have many bad activities compare to today.They were more friendly and cooperated term of helping the other.That is why people choice is went to cinemas to watch movies and is also a good source of income for cinemas management.But in now days indivisuals very modern they think that if we were went to cinemas to watch any kind of films we just waste our time because the same film we can watch on internet as well.That is why the number of people are less in theatre and cinema also.Now days people used their mobile phone to aware with news of world and their are many social media plate form for them to enjoy their time.Further more,in my percpective the government should take the notics of cinemas and theatre to show only family friendly shows and dramas and film because it is not just entertainment for people it also source of income of many people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You refer to both sides of the debate: cinemas and theatres once provided entertainment and income, while people today can watch films online and use social media. You also offer a view that government should support family-friendly productions. However, the discussion is only partial and the position is not consistently clear: the opening does not state your own opinion, and the final recommendation does not directly explain whether venues remain culturally or economically important. Several points, such as people in the past being more friendly, are asserted without showing how they support the argument. Develop each side with relevant reasons and a specific example, then state your position clearly and maintain it throughout. The response meets the task’s length requirement; 16 words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a recognisable movement from past cinema-going to present-day online entertainment, and linking expressions such as “Moreover,” “That is why,” and “Further more” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, so the two views and your own opinion are not clearly separated. Several sentences run together without full stops, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow; for example, the opening moves from families going to cinemas directly into a claim about theatre dramas. Some links are also repetitive or unclear, particularly repeated uses of “That is why.” Use separate paragraphs for each view and your opinion, and make each paragraph develop one main point with clear sentence boundaries.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “digital age,” “source of income,” “social media,” and “family friendly,” which helps communicate the general subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning hard to interpret. Examples include “people were crazy to watch their super stars on cinemas,” “cooperated term of helping,” and “take the notics of cinemas.” Spelling errors such as “indivisuals,” “augumed,” and “plate form” also reduce clarity. Build a more precise set of expressions for discussing access, cultural value, employment, and audience habits, and check spelling and natural word combinations when editing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example with “because” and “that is why,” but control of sentence structure is weak and errors frequently make the message difficult to follow. Verb forms and tense are often inaccurate, as in “many families are going” after a past-time reference and “people were went to the cinemas.” Agreement and sentence construction are also problematic in “the number of people are less” and “their are many social media.” Punctuation is inconsistent: several independent ideas are joined without full stops, and commas are often missing after introductory phrases. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them using a range of correctly formed clauses and consistent tense.

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