Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Few people beleive that theatres and cinemas are no necessery for human they can watch all the sourice of intertanment on internet other argue that thes things are still imporant for cultur and cuntery groth.I also belevie that inernet option is best for people for watching any thing online .

on the one hand , there are many resions for why people belive that cinemas and theatres are no important for them . Firstly few people have no to munch free time because the have busy life and thay can not show intrest for cinemas. for exampal some human are do work ragular in ther workplace they can not go outside for viste these places for intertanment and they think that the wast of time and money. secondely, most of de humans are like to wach movies and storys on there mobile phone while the trivling and they think that it is eassy way to pest time and enjoye ecery where and any where.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I also believe that internet option is best”—and give relevant reasons for the view that online entertainment is convenient, including limited free time and watching on a phone while travelling. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: it does not explain the opposing view that theatres and cinemas remain economically and culturally important, and your own opinion is not supported in depth. The examples are brief and general, such as people being busy or seeing films on their phones. The response is also 86 words below the required minimum, which leaves too little space to develop both sides. To improve, discuss each view, explain why it matters, and support your position with specific examples.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic and your opinion, followed by a paragraph beginning “on the one hand” that gives reasons for online viewing. “Firstly” and “secondly” also signal the sequence of points. However, the discussion stops after this one side, so there is no overall progression through both views or a concluding summary. Some links are mechanical, and the long second paragraph combines several ideas without clear sentence boundaries. Plan separate paragraphs for the online-viewing argument, the continuing value of theatres and cinemas, and your conclusion. Use linking phrases to show relationships between ideas, rather than relying mainly on numbered transitions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that make the reader work to identify some words. The topic is recognisable through terms such as “cinemas,” “theatres,” “internet,” “movies,” and “entertainment,” and you attempt phrases such as “busy life” and “waste of time and money.” However, inaccurate forms such as “sourice,” “intertanment,” “cuntery groth,” and “trivling” weaken clarity, while repeated use of “people” and “watch” limits range. Build a reliable set of correctly spelled topic vocabulary and use more precise expressions for convenience, cultural value, and economic contribution. Check spelling carefully, especially in key words that carry your main ideas.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences, for example by using “because” and “while,” and the reader can generally follow the basic meaning. However, sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent. In “few people have no to munch free time because the have busy life,” the clauses are not formed accurately; “they can not show intrest” also lacks a clear grammatical construction. There are problems with articles, agreement, verb forms, and punctuation, including run-on sentences and inconsistent capitalisation. Practise writing clear simple sentences first, then combine them accurately with conjunctions. Review subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries before adding more complex structures.

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