Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Some individuals express that in the Digital era, theatres and cinemas are no longer essential as people watch all the entertainment they want online. However some argue that theatres and cinemas are very important both economically and culturally. In my opinion i am in the favour to support that theatres and cinemas are still important.

On the one hand, theatres and cinemas are still important and that makes a huge difference when we go and watch them in theatres. When we watch them we support cinemas and the economy builds and people who had invested in the cinema also gets appreciation and we also learn many things outside when we go and watch in theatres. For instance, when we go watch a cinema in theatre we learn to socialize with others and moreover our mood gets changed by the place and it makes us a bit happy. So this also gives employment to the workers in theatres.

on the contrary, people say that it is no longer important to watch cinemas in theatres, in this the piracy comes into picture whereas people record movies and put them online. So this has a major limitation. For instance people who sit at home and watch will never get any experience ragarding the theatres and they will be having some fear to socialize with others when they come out of their comfort zone.

In conclusion, people who go to theatres to watch cinemas support all kinds of work and gain experience in many ways and also they will have a thinking of how things work outside.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear opinion that theatres and cinemas remain important, and you mention economic and social benefits, including employment and opportunities to socialise. However, the discussion of the opposing view is only partial: piracy is introduced, but the point that online entertainment is convenient or offers wide choice is not explained. Several supporting ideas are also unclear or insufficiently developed, such as how cinema attendance builds the economy and what people learn by going out. To strengthen the response, explain both views directly, use a specific example to support each, and make your conclusion restate a reasoned position rather than mainly repeating earlier points.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two contrasting body paragraphs and a conclusion. Phrases such as “On the one hand,” “For instance,” and “In conclusion” help signal the stages of the argument. However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes difficult to follow: the first body paragraph moves from economic support to appreciation, socialising and mood without clearly linking these points. “On the contrary” introduces the second view, but the paragraph then focuses on piracy and the effects of staying home rather than clearly explaining the case for online entertainment. Use topic sentences that state each paragraph’s main point, and connect each example explicitly to that point.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “digital era,” “economically,” “culturally,” “piracy,” and “employment,” so the reader can understand the general subject. However, the range is limited and several expressions are repetitive or imprecise, particularly repeated references to “watch” and “important.” Some collocations are awkward, such as “the economy builds,” “people who had invested … gets appreciation,” and “a thinking of how things work outside.” These choices sometimes make the intended meaning less clear. Aim for more precise phrases for the benefits and drawbacks of cinema attendance, and check that words combine naturally. The suggestions below offer alternatives that fit this topic and an academic discussion.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using clauses with “when,” “whereas” and “that,” but control is inconsistent. Errors occur in agreement and verb forms, as in “people who had invested … also gets appreciation,” and in sentence construction, as in “In my opinion i am in the favour to support.” Capitalisation and punctuation are also uneven: “on the contrary” begins a paragraph in lowercase, and the opening sentence needs a comma before “however.” These problems can make some relationships between ideas harder to follow. Practise building accurate sentences around one main idea, then add subordinate clauses only when their structure is clear; also check subject–verb agreement and sentence boundaries.

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