Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Introduction:

we were discuss the two main point of the paragraph theey have two main point most of the people were says the modern age,theatres and cinemas are not important.But some people were says the theatres and cinemas has it own value.It shows the both thing economy and cultural.

overview:

we were discuss the just two main point of the passage.the most of the people were says the theatres and cinemas are not important from the modern time period.Most of people were watching the fevourite TV shows and drama on our mobile phone and the young generation of the warlds were not going to the cinemas and theatres they have see every thing on the mobile phone the modern time most of the people were says its socisl media.on the other hand some people were says the cinenas and theatres are the culturall places.most of the old age people were going to the cinema and theatres to watiching movies the our family and friends they have spend our golden time them and make a memories.In my personal openion of that satution is the theatres and cinemas both are the cultural places.the people were going our friends and family to the cinemas they watching movies and watching theatres drama this thing is so much advantages. they have spend times with our friend and family and create a memories and on the other hand the people were usuing the mobile

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify both views: online entertainment is presented as a reason cinemas are less important, while cinemas and theatres are described as cultural places where people spend time with family and friends. You also give a personal opinion in favour of their cultural value. However, the response addresses the task only minimally: the economic importance mentioned in the prompt is not explained, and the online-view argument is mostly a list of people watching shows on phones rather than a developed reason. Examples and supporting details are limited, and the final sentence is unfinished. The response is also 12 words below the required minimum. Develop each side with a clear reason and a relevant example, then complete your conclusion.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is an attempt to organise the response using labels such as “Introduction” and “overview,” and “on the other hand” signals a contrast between the views. However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the second section repeats that people watch entertainment on mobile phones, then shifts to older people and family memories before returning to the writer’s opinion. The labels do not create clear, developed paragraphs, and several sentences run together, making relationships between ideas difficult to follow. The ending, “the people were usuing the mobile,” is incomplete. Arrange the response into an introduction, one paragraph for each view, and a conclusion; use linking phrases only where they clarify the connection.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “digital age,” “cinemas,” “theatres,” “cultural places,” and “social media,” so the main topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “people,” “watching,” and “mobile phone” recurring without much variation. Several spelling and word-choice errors also make the writing harder to read, such as “fevourite,” “cinenas,” “culturall,” and “openion.” Some phrases are not natural in this context, including “spend our golden time them” and “create a memories.” Build a small set of accurate topic phrases and check spelling and collocations before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

You attempt to express connected ideas and contrast the two positions, but sentence structures are very limited and frequent grammatical errors sometimes distort meaning. Verb forms are often incorrect: “we were discuss” and “people were says” should use forms such as “we will discuss” and “people say.” Agreement and pronouns are also problematic in “theatres and cinemas has it own value” and “they have spend times.” Articles and sentence boundaries need attention as well; several ideas are joined into long strings without clear punctuation, and the final sentence is unfinished. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while,” or “although.”

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