Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

in the digital age, many people believe that theater amd cinemas are not important for entertainment because community of people waatch the film and dramas in our mobile and home televison.the argue that cinemas and theaters are still important both economically and culturally but i cannoot beleive ,because more than people like mobile and television.in our country some cinemas and theater permanently closed and some open one or two times in the years. he is very negative point. in our area no any cinemas but one theater, that is opened one time in the year.

according to my knowledge more then people use mobile phone in our daily life, and see the news, films, shows,comedy,and dramas and more latest activities in our daily life.

in my knowledge,i am use mobile phone and television in our daily life and i suggest people he use mobile and save money, time and transport.for example when people use our mobile they saves money theater and cinemas

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify both views: online entertainment is convenient, while theatres and cinemas may matter economically and culturally. You also give a personal preference for mobile phones and television, supported by observations that venues have closed or open rarely in your area. However, the discussion is very brief and does not explain the economic or cultural importance of venues, so the second view is mentioned rather than meaningfully discussed. Your examples about saving money, time and transport support online viewing, but need clearer explanation and development. The response also falls short of the required minimum length, which limits how fully you can address the task. Develop each side with reasons and specific examples, then state your opinion clearly in a concluding paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: the opening introduces the two views, and later sentences focus on mobile-phone use and your own experience. Phrases such as “according to my knowledge” and “for example” signal a relationship between ideas. However, the response has no clear paragraph structure or conclusion, and the progression between points is difficult to follow. For instance, “he is very negative point” does not clearly connect the closure of local venues to the argument, while the final example is unfinished. Some linking phrases are repeated or used awkwardly. Separate the two sides into paragraphs, use clear topic sentences, and connect each example explicitly to the point it supports.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “entertainment,” “economically,” “culturally,” “films,” “dramas,” and “save money.” These words help communicate the general subject and your preference for watching at home. However, the range is limited and several expressions are imprecise or repetitive, such as “more latest activities” and “one or two times in the years.” Spelling errors—including “amd,” “waatch,” “televison,” and “beleive”—also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise topic vocabulary and natural collocations, such as “stream films online,” “local venues,” and “attend a performance.” Proofread spelling and avoid repeating “in our daily life” when a more specific phrase would express the idea.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple statements and attempts a few longer structures, including “because community of people…” and “when people use our mobile…”. This shows an effort to explain reasons and examples, but sentence patterns remain limited and errors frequently make relationships between ideas unclear. Examples include “the argue that cinemas,” “i am use mobile phone,” and “they saves money,” where subject–verb forms and verb constructions are inaccurate. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “in our area no any cinemas but one theater.” Use complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, practise present-simple forms (“people use,” “they save”), and check articles, agreement, and punctuation. Building accurate simple sentences first will make longer explanations easier to follow.

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