Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 21 · 2026-10-12

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important as people can watch all the entertainment they want online. Others argue that theatres and cinemas are still important both economically and culturally.

Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Some people say in the digital age, theatres and cinemas are no longer important people watch all entertainment online. Other says this the important for economically and culturally.

In my opinon. There is a era of online world. People are much comfortable to watch things online they want to see. In this fast era people have no time to go the cinemas and theatres.

For example. Cinemas has a specific time to show their movies and other entertainments. some people is busy in the work or office they do not have time to go there. so he prefer to watch their entertainment online when they are comfortable.

In the other hand. Some people says cinemas and theatres are important for economically and culturally. They think Cinemas and theatres are a good thing for activity and spend time with their families. In the old culture people prefer to watch their enterainment in the cinemas. In some way cinemas and theaters is important for leconomically. For example. When any series relise they shown on the cinemas and they earn money from it. they think it is a big part of the film industoray. Some people think the old culture is a good thing. And they prefer to gathering in cinemas.

In the last some people prefer to watch online entertainmen becasue he do not have time

to go the cinemas and theaters. they prefer to watch where he comfortable. In the other hand people think there is good geathering and the old culture is a good culture. They like to enjoy these entertainment with families and they think this is important fo economally

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You address both views and state a preference for online entertainment, while also mentioning cinemas’ cultural and economic roles. The example about people being busy and watching films when convenient is relevant, and the reference to cinema screenings generating income begins to support the opposing view. However, the position is not consistently clear: the opening is difficult to interpret, and the conclusion mainly repeats both sides rather than clearly confirming your own opinion. Several points, such as cinemas as a way to spend time with family and the importance of “old culture,” are asserted but not explained. Develop each view with a clearer reason or specific example, and make your own judgement explicit throughout. The response meets the stated length requirement; 11 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph supporting online viewing, a paragraph about cinemas, and a concluding paragraph. This helps the reader identify the two sides being discussed. However, progression within and between paragraphs is often unclear, and the conclusion repeats earlier points instead of bringing them together into a clear final judgement. Linking phrases such as “In the other hand” are used inaccurately, while repeated “For example” and “In the last” do not always show the relationship between ideas. Some references, including “they” and “this,” have unclear antecedents. Organise each body paragraph around one main claim, explain it in sequence, and use accurate transitions and references to make the connections easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant topic words, including “cinemas,” “theatres,” “online,” “economically,” and “culturally,” so the general subject is usually recognisable. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or forms make meaning less clear. For instance, “a good thing for activity” does not express the intended benefit precisely, and “old culture” is repeated without clarifying whether you mean a shared cinema-going tradition. Spelling errors such as “opinon,” “enterainment,” “relise,” and “industoray” also reduce accuracy. Build a more varied set of phrases for convenience, shared experiences, cultural traditions, and revenue, and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use simple patterns, and you make some attempts to connect ideas with clauses, as in “some people is busy in the work or office they do not have time to go there.” However, sentence boundaries and basic grammatical forms are frequently inaccurate, so the reader sometimes has to work to understand the relationships between ideas. Examples include “Other says,” “Cinemas has,” “people have no time to go the cinemas,” and “they prefer to watch where he comfortable.” These show problems with agreement, pronouns, articles, and verb forms. Punctuation is also unreliable, particularly the sentence fragments beginning “For example.” Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “because,” “while,” and “although.”

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